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Dionisios
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Haha wow! This is great! What a twist, I was totally surprised and did not expect the ending to play out the way it did. Great work I am looking forward to reading more.


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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
    Thanks so much, Dionisios Efkarpidis. I always have fun with Flash Fiction. Misdirection is one of the joys of writing. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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LOL! You totally fooled me with the surprise ending. It's well-written and suspenseful, and there are no typos! I see why it won the contest! It's funny, as I was trying to count the words, I noticed you used "palmist/psychic." And I couldn't tell if it counted as one word or two. If you count it as two words, then it's 101 words long. So I guess it gets counted as one word! Interesting to note for the next flash fiction contest of 150 words!


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 11-Mar-2019
    Thank you, Aiona. I'm glad you enjoyed the wee story. Counting words can be tricky. I always rely on MS-Word. It seems to be the gold standard. Hyphenated and 'slash' words are generally counted as one. But '. . .' is counted as a word, too. I don't trust the FS counter. If you use MS-Word, trust it. My best advice. On this site, Flash contest can require anywhere from 50 to 500 words. Each contest is different. I hope this helps. Peace, Lee

reply by Aiona on 11-Mar-2019
    For a second I thought you said that "...." counts as a word for the contest. Then, I realized you meant, MS Word counts it as a "word." LOL!

reply by the author on 11-Mar-2019
    That's true. If you write 'Tom thought, 'No' . . . then said, 'Yes'. MS-Word will count the '. . .' as a word. I'm not sure how the Contest Compliance Committee judges these things, but I've never gone wrong relying on MS-Word to do the counting. L
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The palmist knew a lot about the dead man just by looking at the hand. Just picking up clues like the policeman would. The psychics on T V could of found the rest of the body easily with the severed hand. Do they really need you believe for it to work

This is a well written short story and well deserving of the win. Congrats.

Keep writing

Joan


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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Joan. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by dragonpoet on 19-Feb-2019
    You are most kindly welcome, Lee.

    Joan
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A very well deserved win. Your story was most creative, surprising and all done in a hundred words. If you don't mind, I'd like to use your story as an example the next time I attempt to write for this prompt. Best wishes.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Victor. By all means, use this story as a template. If it helps at all, my approach to Flash Fiction is all about misdirection. Get your readers to see one thing, while you spring something else on them. I hope it helps. Thank you again. Peace, Lee

reply by victor 66 on 17-Feb-2019
    Lee, I'm not the "magician" you are, but I will certainly give it try.
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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.


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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Committee. I'm honored. Lee
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Very interesting. Your story leaves me with some questions although I like it very much.

Was it the hand of a another person? Was this a ghost? I'm curious


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Sandra. I'm glad you enjoyed. Yes, the severed hand was delivered to the psychic by Detective Renko.
    With Flash Fiction, the idea is to coax the reader into believing one thing, then, at the end, revealing a second reality.
    No ghost. Just a severed hand, a jaded palmist, and a skeptical homicide detective. I hope this clears it up.
    Thanks again. Peace, Lee

reply by Sandra Elizabeth Williams on 01-Feb-2019
    Aah...OK, thanks for helping with the clarification.

    You certainly achieved the objective.

    All the best!
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Nice little flash piece , Lee. You caught me off-guard with disembodied hand, nice. I do have one suggestion.

Homicide Detective Dewey Renko sighed, placed the disembodied hand back into the picnic cooler, rose to leave.--Since you have a list of actions, I'd recommend an and before rose. You could delete the Detective's first name.

Good luck!

Take care,
Russell


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Russell. Glad I caught you off-guard.
    Your suggestion is valid, but I didn't omit the 'and' based on word-count. I just feel 'and' and 'then' are used unnecessarily in many situations--even if 'tradition' calls for them. If 'and' can be omitted after 'sighed', why not after 'cooler'?
    I consistently omit 'and' and 'then' in my longer stories. Lordy, I love bein' the rebel!
    Again, your suggestion is valid, Russell. But I was sired by a mule.

    Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by F. Wehr3 on 01-Feb-2019
    Sired by a mule? You too. That fella gets around, don't he? Cheers!
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Excellent.
Your story magnifies the emphasis people put on affirmation.
Tell them what they want to hear, and you are a hero.
As you relate the facts, it becomes clear that any answer will do, just as long as it is positive.
People go to extremes to find answers; seldom looking at the empirical evidence.
We still have the "Wizard of Oz," with us on many pulpits. Oh, for a platitude to make one comfortable.


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, ElPoetry001. I'm delighted you related to my story. Peace, Lee

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He he he, I have never been a believer either! And that is a hefty fee for a load of old nonsense! The detective should have known better! I enjoyed the ride, always a professional presentation from you, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Dolly. I never thought I'd have fun with a severed hand. Never say never. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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Lee,

This piece is great. It is very well written. In just a few words, you lead the reader down a path, one that is willingly followed, and then, WHAM, you give us the zinger. It takes a talented writer to pull off a good red herring. I say 'good' red herring because many authors try this kind of thing but just can't manage to make it work. You, Lee, are a writer who knows how to make it work. You also, quite skillfully, revealed to the reader, in very few words, a lot of background information.

You make this look easy, but I know these things take some thought. Well done and good luck in the contest.

Suzanne


 Comment Written 31-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Suzanne. As you suggest, these short pieces can be pretty tricky. A complete story, with misdirection, with an unexpected reveal. A lot to accomplish in 100 words. I fail more than I succeed, but I enjoy the challenge.
    I really appreciate all the kind words. Peace, Lee
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