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The Psychic


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He he he, I have never been a believer either! And that is a hefty fee for a load of old nonsense! The detective should have known better! I enjoyed the ride, always a professional presentation from you, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Dolly. I never thought I'd have fun with a severed hand. Never say never. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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Lee,

This piece is great. It is very well written. In just a few words, you lead the reader down a path, one that is willingly followed, and then, WHAM, you give us the zinger. It takes a talented writer to pull off a good red herring. I say 'good' red herring because many authors try this kind of thing but just can't manage to make it work. You, Lee, are a writer who knows how to make it work. You also, quite skillfully, revealed to the reader, in very few words, a lot of background information.

You make this look easy, but I know these things take some thought. Well done and good luck in the contest.

Suzanne


 Comment Written 31-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Suzanne. As you suggest, these short pieces can be pretty tricky. A complete story, with misdirection, with an unexpected reveal. A lot to accomplish in 100 words. I fail more than I succeed, but I enjoy the challenge.
    I really appreciate all the kind words. Peace, Lee
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Hello Lee,
Great little story for the contest with interesting art work.
Looks like Det. Renko missed a good opportunity to learn some salient facts.
I like the little subtle references: "she smiled at the irony," "find what's missing," "the bulk of the man." Perfect ending, too.
Well done
I'd give this a six if I had one.
Good luck with the judges.
Robert


 Comment Written 31-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Robert. These short-shorts are fun distractions, but I'd to have to make a living this way.
    Thanks for pointing out my favorite lines. I really appreciate. Peace, Lee
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-I love the artwork, Lee, and
appreciate the note.
-You developed this story with
very good detail, and set up
the scene with the psychic
as she looks at the hand.
-I like the line about not finding
"the bulk of the man."
-Since he figured the whole thing
would be a waste of time, she
sensed it, and charged him $40.00 for nothing.
-She was not going to help him out,
but maybe she could have.
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 31-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Pam. I like the way you sussed the psychology of such a short story. Much appreciated. Peace, Lee

reply by Pam (respa) on 01-Feb-2019
    You are very welcome, Lee. I wasn't sure if I was getting the right idea, as I thought the story could have gone several ways. That was what made it good! I didn't know if he was really there for himself, or for a case he needed help with. But I appreciate your comment about "sussing out the psychology."

reply by Pam (respa) on 01-Feb-2019
    For some reason, this repeated, Lee.
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Cute story with a great punchline. Very clever and clear imagery to boot. I had to read it several times before I got the complet jest of the story but once I did I was delighted to have read. I love reading and writing these short flash or dribble fiction stories. Great jo.
J


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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, J. Yes, I enjoy these 'shorties' too. But they're really complicated. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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I laughed right out loud! This is so fun and VERY well done!! Kudos to you, Humpwhistle! And good luck with the contest.


 Comment Written 31-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks for this stellar review, Rachelle Allen. I'm delighted you got a kick out of it. Peace, Lee
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Read it twice. First time around I thought the client was female. Got it the second time. Neat to get it all in within the required word count and still get a fast-moving story. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 31-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Adri7enne. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Peace, Lee
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This is great! I have recently started getting into Flash Fiction and this is one of the best examples I have come across. I love that humor and the images that you build. Reading it gave me a desire to know more of a story, which I think is a measure of a truly successful story. Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 31-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Jaime P. Yes, Flash can be fun. But it's a real challenge, too. I wish you luck with Flash. Peace, Lee
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This appears to be compliant as far as word count is concerned. I wonder how many psychics are ever placed in this position. She seemed to know her stuff. Dismembered corpses always pose difficult problems for the police though perhaps less so than prior to the science behind DNA.


 Comment Written 30-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Jim. I think cops are natural skeptics, therefore loathe to consult with psychics. DNA is great for identifying a body--or, in this case, a portion of a body--but isn't much help when it comes locating the rest of it. Thanks again, Jim. Peace, Lee
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Good afternoon, Lee

Perfect. The right amount of humor and suspense. Like how you had the reader thinking along on line then switch with a gotcha moment. Well done!

Take care and stay safe,

Ray


 Comment Written 30-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks again, Ray. Yeah, this short-shorts need to turn on a dime. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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