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The Psychic


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Dorothy Farrell
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Hi Lee, this is brilliant and has to be a winner. I've said it before but yet again I say, 'you should be publishing these works of yours'. Loved this and it made me laugh as usual. Good luck in the contest on a very clever piece of work. Dorothy


 Comment Written 30-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Dorothy. I love the laughter. And you have to admit, writing is a lot more fun than publishing. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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Very clever. Did not see that coming. (Guess I'm not psychic) Well written but for one sentence that gave me pause.
... placed the disembodied hand back into the picnic cooler, (and) rose to leave.
To keep your word count could delete the word "total" in the next sentence.
Just a thought. Enjoyed the story.


 Comment Written 30-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    thank you, Rhonda. I'm glad you enjoyed, and were surprised by the reveal. About the missing 'and' ... I often substitute a comma for 'and' and 'then'--even in pieces that aren't 'count-oriented'. Call it a stylistic choice. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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Lifeline sharply truncated. She grinned at the irony.LOL
Read it a second time as advised.
"I cannot help you find the bulk of the man."
Another neat play of words on the situation.

Clever juxtaposition at the end, Horror followed by practicality of the psychic.


 Comment Written 30-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Shari. To me, flash is a story that flies under the radar--until the second reading. Thanks for the stellar review. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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I like this because you put showing instead of telling. I like the twist of the detective at the end when he realized that talking to the psychic was a waste of time. Well written! Good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Raul. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by Raul1 on 02-Feb-2019
    You're welcome
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And this is good flash fiction. I read it twice and grinned again. My favorite line is .."I cannot help you find the bulk of the man." Putting the hand back in the cooler is just well cool.
You are the master of humor.
God bless


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, kiwijenny. Yeah, the severed hand in the picnic cooler tickled me, too. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by kiwijenny on 02-Feb-2019
    Me too. I gotta hand it to you...it made me remember my greatest faux pas. A friend who?d lost his arm in an accident was telling me how expensive prosthetics were. I asked why he didn?t get them second hand...
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You have crafted a perfect story, sprinkled with enough quiet clues for this reader to have a gasp of delight at the severed hand. And an appreciation of the psychic's pragmatism.


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks again, LisaMay. For me, sprinkling clues is what makes Flash fun. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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HA! That totally surprised me. She would know the moment she touched the hand it was a deceased person's hand. The Captain must have been desperate to try something so droll.
He thought she could locate the body. Well done Lee. Good Luck in the contest. Nancy:)


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Nancy. Always good to surprise the reader. I'm glad I nicked you! Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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OK. You wrote another winner. How can anybody top that? I ask again--"Where do your wonderfully insane ideas come from?" When I click on your messages, I know for a fact that I will be entertained. You never disappoint.
Even when the psychic said, "I cannot help you find the bulk of the man," I did not understand where you were going. Maybe I am slow on the uptake, but you manage to get me every time.
Congratulations.


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Debbie. Honestly, I don't think up these stories. I start with a promising germ--in this case, a palmist--then try to weave a story. Some work out better than others.
    No, you're not slow on the up-take at all. My job is to misdirect, so blame me.

    I love your reviews. Peace, Lee
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Good one, Lee.

Indeed, what's missing in the bulk of the man, and his chopped off hand won't reveal where it left the bulk!


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thank you, apky. Yes, the bulk of the man remains missing. Ain't it fun? Peace, Lee
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You did a wonderful job constructing this 100 Word entry. I reread it as you suggested and it does come across differently... I seemed to notice more details. Great job on this story and a good ..aha.. moment. Good luck.

Melissa


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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Melissa. Aye, the details always seem clearer on the second read. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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