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Comment by

rtobaygo

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Exceptional

This work has reached the exceptional level

Good afternoon, Lee

Perfect. The right amount of humor and suspense. Like how you had the reader thinking along on line then switch with a gotcha moment. Well done!

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

Comment Written 30-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019

Thanks again, Ray. Yeah, this short-shorts need to turn on a dime. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

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Hi Humpwhistle :)
I really enjoyed the twist in this short story. Very witty and well written, I laughed out loud at the ending line!
Wishing you the best of luck in the contest.
Kind regards, Debra :)

Comment Written 30-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019

Thanks so much, Debra. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

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Lee, this flash story is my brand of "sick" humor. You did a great job disguising the reveal until the proper moment. It made me laugh out loud. Well done, sir. :) Nancy

Comment Written 30-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019

Thank you, Nancy. Yeah, it is a bit sick, isn't it? It's always about finding the right moment to spring the reveal. Glad it worked for you. Thanks again. Peace, Lee

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Hi Lee, this is brilliant and has to be a winner. I've said it before but yet again I say, 'you should be publishing these works of yours'. Loved this and it made me laugh as usual. Good luck in the contest on a very clever piece of work. Dorothy

Comment Written 30-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019

Thanks so much, Dorothy. I love the laughter. And you have to admit, writing is a lot more fun than publishing. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

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Rhonda Skinner

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Very clever. Did not see that coming. (Guess I'm not psychic) Well written but for one sentence that gave me pause.
... placed the disembodied hand back into the picnic cooler, (and) rose to leave.
To keep your word count could delete the word "total" in the next sentence.
Just a thought. Enjoyed the story.

Comment Written 30-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

thank you, Rhonda. I'm glad you enjoyed, and were surprised by the reveal. About the missing 'and' ... I often substitute a comma for 'and' and 'then'--even in pieces that aren't 'count-oriented'. Call it a stylistic choice. Thanks again. Peace, Lee

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Lifeline sharply truncated. She grinned at the irony.LOL
Read it a second time as advised.
"I cannot help you find the bulk of the man."
Another neat play of words on the situation.

Clever juxtaposition at the end, Horror followed by practicality of the psychic.

Comment Written 30-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Thanks so much, Shari. To me, flash is a story that flies under the radar--until the second reading. Thanks for the stellar review. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

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I like this because you put showing instead of telling. I like the twist of the detective at the end when he realized that talking to the psychic was a waste of time. Well written! Good luck in the contest!

Comment Written 29-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Thank you, Raul. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by Raul1 on 02-Feb-2019

You're welcome

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kiwijenny

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Excellent

And this is good flash fiction. I read it twice and grinned again. My favorite line is .."I cannot help you find the bulk of the man." Putting the hand back in the cooler is just well cool.
You are the master of humor.
God bless

Comment Written 29-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Thanks so much, kiwijenny. Yeah, the severed hand in the picnic cooler tickled me, too. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by kiwijenny on 02-Feb-2019

Me too. I gotta hand it to you...it made me remember my greatest faux pas. A friend who?d lost his arm in an accident was telling me how expensive prosthetics were. I asked why he didn?t get them second hand...

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You have crafted a perfect story, sprinkled with enough quiet clues for this reader to have a gasp of delight at the severed hand. And an appreciation of the psychic's pragmatism.

Comment Written 29-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Thanks again, LisaMay. For me, sprinkling clues is what makes Flash fun. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

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HA! That totally surprised me. She would know the moment she touched the hand it was a deceased person's hand. The Captain must have been desperate to try something so droll.
He thought she could locate the body. Well done Lee. Good Luck in the contest. Nancy:)

Comment Written 29-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019

Thanks so much, Nancy. Always good to surprise the reader. I'm glad I nicked you! Thanks again. Peace, Lee

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