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The Psychic


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Good one, Lee.

Indeed, what's missing in the bulk of the man, and his chopped off hand won't reveal where it left the bulk!


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thank you, apky. Yes, the bulk of the man remains missing. Ain't it fun? Peace, Lee
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You did a wonderful job constructing this 100 Word entry. I reread it as you suggested and it does come across differently... I seemed to notice more details. Great job on this story and a good ..aha.. moment. Good luck.

Melissa


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Melissa. Aye, the details always seem clearer on the second read. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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Give the man a hand! (sorry, sorry, couldn't resist). An excellent flash, superb tease and reveal. I can't write these things to save my sorry life, but if I could, I wouldn't bother entering after reading this. Superb.


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Emma. Give the man a severed hand! I started the story with a palmist, the severed hand was a gift from the heavens. Thanks for the stellar review. Peace, Lee
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Woah! That was a bit of a surprise...I sure didn't expect it to be a disembodied hand. Nice touch having the palmist/psychic ask for her fee. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, StoryMan. The whole point of Flash is to surprise. Sometimes I get lucky. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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hi Lee,

you know with these short pieces, it's actually rare to find one that is actually flash fiction, but here it is! lol

very well written and the little crumbs are there throughout it so when the moment comes near the end, it all makes sense. The crumbs are the trickiest bits to place - too obvious, the end falters, to meagre and the leaps too far.

this one is perfect in that regard. very nice indeed. I hope it wins, but I'm not the best judge in these things, but it should.

G


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thank you extra much, G. Not everyone understand the ins and outs of writing Flash. Many simply count words.
    I agree, the crumbs are always the key. If a second read makes the reader slap his/her forehead, that's Flash.

    Thanks for a real read. Peace, Lee
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As a woman who's read a lot of palms and tarot cards, I appreciate the humor in your flash. The knowing and the not-knowing is what being a psychic is all about and you have captured it perfectly.
Have fun with the stars as I had fun with the read!


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Ah, so you've read some palms? Ever a severed one? I hope not, Beck. I really had fun with this.
    thanks so much, Beck. It's fun to write stories for people who get it. Peace, Lee
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Yes, this works even better the second time. Good flash twist. Excellent dialog driven micro-fiction with strong POV, pacing and characterization. Bravo! A strong contender, I'm sure.

Warmly, rd


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, rd. I think Flash should always work better the second time around. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by rama devi on 02-Feb-2019
    :-)))
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country ranch writer
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Well looks like the tables are turned on them thinking she could tell them where the rest of the body might be from just the cut off hand.


 Comment Written 28-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, crw. You're right. Those detectives were barking up the wrong tree. Thanks again. Peace, Lee

reply by country ranch writer on 02-Feb-2019
    Smiles
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Lee,

Yep. I agree. It reveals itself late, perhaps, but that second read is never necessary-- just soooo yummy when the work is this fab.

So sad for the rest of us. We, on the 'other hand', may as well cut off our own hands. The writing ones, that is, when it comes to these contests against you.


 Comment Written 28-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Robyn. I always tailor my Flash for the second read. Just me, I guess..
    I appreciate your kind words, but you know it's never over until the Committee sings. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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I say, gumshoe, give the lady a big hand. Excellent entry for the one hundred word writing contest prompt, Lee. Could Abigail Sciutto have done better, do you imagine?


 Comment Written 28-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    thank you, Red. Abby always finds something to point to the killer. She has super powers and killer thighs.
    Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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