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So sure of himself

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Well done. I love dribble. It is a satisfying challenge to be able to tell a lot in so few words. Good luck in the contest! ............... Teresa........... ":~)


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Thank you, Teresa. I appreciate your review of this piece. :) Bob
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-Good image, Bob.
-You set the scene well
in the opening paragraph,
and give us a sense that
Clyde isn't doing well,
but he is not ready to give in yet.
-But, that sweet sip of vodka
told him otherwise.
-The last line is good, and
unfortunately, portrays the
"logic" of those who can't
turn away from the bottle.
-Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much, Pam. I appreciate your review. Bob

reply by Pam (respa) on 29-Jan-2019
    You are very welcome, Bob.
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Great. We've got a twist, here, as at first it seems this might be a victim of some assault. The blurred image could have been looking in a broken mirror, but it's his alcohol fuelled brain. Well done, a real 'flash' giving us a whole story.


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much, my friend. Your six stars and comments are most appreciated. :) Bob
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Complete and exact portrayal of an alcoholic. Short and to the point. I have never read something so short that gave one the whole picture. You are truly gifted and I am happy to follow your writings. Much luck in the contest. I really think this is a winner.


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Awww. Thanks so much, Annie. I appreciate this wonderful review and am so glad to have you as a fan. :) Bob
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Suuuure you can , Clyde....you just keep telling yourself that. ;) A unique offering for the contest, Bob, thank you for sharing and good luck! Yvette


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    And I thank you too, Yvette. I appreciate your following all of my writing. :) Bob
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A little alcoholic dribble fiction story between chapters. I guess all the addicted think that, - I can stop anytime - kidding themselves more so than others. Well written Bob,
cheers,
valda


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much, Valda. You are truly an exceptional fan and I appreciate you. :) Bob
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An amazing write! A whole story in 50 words! This is the best!
So much truth in your dribble. My dear son-in-law was an alcoholic for many, many years, until he almost lost his life from it. He has been alcohol free now for 2 years :) He would always state, as you did in your dribble, "I can stop drinking anytime I want".
Love the artwork you chose.
Blessings and hugs!
Gale


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much, Gale. I sincerely appreciate your input on this one. :) Bob
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Sanku
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Graphic and surreal presentation of an alcoholic. The taste of vodka on his throat, his reflection which brought on a death wish, and the closing line 'I can stop at any time ...'(the exact line my brother used to mouth everytime I tried to caution him)

It took back me to those days when my sons were growing up.With both my father and my brother ending their life courtesy addiction, alcoholism dangled over my head like the sword of Damocles till the boys reached 21 and left home. I am eternally thankful to God that they grew up to be sane individuals .Happily they took after my husband.
All the best for the contest.


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Hello there, Santha. I want you to know I sincerely appreciate your six-star review of my dribble fiction. You are too kind. Blessings. Bob
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You have captured the self-absorbed delusional aspect of addiction perfectly, in so few words.... drinking himself to death while thinking he can stop anytime.
I just noticed there is a double full stop after "stopping". Delete one.


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Hi, Lisa. You have a keen eye, my friend. Over forty reviews and you were the only one who mentioned the double stop. LOL Thanks for our review and your help. Blessings to you. Bob

reply by LisaMay on 29-Jan-2019
    Thanks Bob. In my past life I was a visual artist and had to do proofreading quite a bit... attention to detail. By the way, did you leave a "y" off the word "our" in your previous reply? Tee hee!

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Got me! I meant "Your" of course. I will have to start keeping an eye out for your works too. You are sharp. :) Bob

reply by LisaMay on 29-Jan-2019
    Thanks, Bob. I would be honoured if you did read some of my work and commented.
    When I did a review on one of giraffmang's pieces, we got into a bit of communication and he suggested you were a writer I should be reading... he gave me a list of recommendations. I am new to the FS site, just a month, and finding my way around it. There are so many writers and I am doing binge reading to get the feel for whose work I want to read more of... while trying to post effectively myself, trying different styles.

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Welcome aboard, Lisa. I hope you can glean something from my writing, however, your own individual style will come to the forefront faster than you think. Bless you. Bob

reply by LisaMay on 29-Jan-2019
    Thanks for your welcome, Bob. I note in your profile your exhortation to write and read each day... might as well start with quality!!
    Have a lovely day... although maybe it is night where you are. Here it is 9am on a lovely summer's day.

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Yours is beautiful country that I would love to see someday. Take care and keep writing. Bob
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Every addict believes that he can stop whatever is addiction is at any time that he decides that he does not want to do it anymore. The problem is that he never wants to stop badly enough to make the proper decision. I thought that I could stop smoking whenever I wanted to. But somehow I never seemed to want to badly enough, that is until the day smoking became so painful that all of a sudden I really did not want to anymore. That was Summer 1985, I have not smoked since.


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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
    Hi, Nolan. LOL I smoked for 65 years from the time i was 13 until nearly two years ago. I have been nicotene free for almost two years. I simply had to quit for my health. Good choice.
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