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A hollow at my core


American Indians' Decline.

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Five thousand years? It goes much deeper than that.

Not just tribes, either. Nations.

Hollow is fine. But where is the outrage?

People don't suffer demise--it's inflicted upon them.

Sorry. You struck a raw nerve.

Peace, Lee


 Comment Written 05-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
    Lee,
    Are you American Indian?
    Thanks,
    Richard

reply by humpwhistle on 05-Feb-2019
    Honestly, Richard, I don't know if I have any true connection to those who came here first. But I feel an affinity, and an empathy. DNA alone doesn't include, exclude, or preclude. Your 'hollow' feeling is evidence of that. Do you have Native American roots? L
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Richard,
This is excellent.
I like how you change the size of your font to mirror the huge 'hollow' and the tiny 'disappeared' - very cleverly done.
A tragic tale, all the more so because it's based on a true story.
The echo of the word 'hollow' adds impact to your poem.
Overall a striking presentation.
Great job. Debs :)



 Comment Written 05-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
    Hi Debs,

    Used today to recover from Sunday and Monday.

    Thanks for your great review.

    Have never met an American Indian, so it's all imagined.

    Have got two books on the subject and have looked on youtube.

    Basically I'm comparing their spirituality to mine.

    Great pity is there are not many left to ask.

    Apparently they were great orators.

    Presume this is similar to storytelling.

    Thanks,

    Richard.
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