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Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Peeztee Feels"

This is a sci-fi book especially for girls.

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This chapter reveals a bit more about the motivations of Peeztee and his association with others. The connections are made tangible as opposed to feelings. Interesting.


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
    Wow, you seemed to have gone through all my recent postings. I'm so grateful! Thank you!
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Poor, poor Peesree, he not used to being in what he perceives as a non sterile environment, and lie like hell on earth, (as if these creatures have a perception of hell) in the end, despite the machinations of Bah -Bee and friends, when confronted by Momtree, Grumps and Ash-Tree, he passes out. (Delicate blossom) well done Helen, most imaginative. I'm catching up al last. Creatively written, well done, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
    Thank you for the wonderful review, Roy! How fun that you called him a "delicate blossom!" Lol. Appreciate you!!

reply by royowen on 12-Feb-2019
    Welcome Helen
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Cheers & <*> ohdah, Helen;
> It always came to mind on this planet all the trees have an intertwining of a connected network between them and also between the creatures of the planet.
< What was distracting was, remembering all the names In trying to identify the physical nature of these characters, is theyy interact with each other by saying certain words that offend some, but he said to others, and pity on another?
> I had a hard time identifying with the characters, visually, but you came across expresssing them extremely well, emotionally. That way, I could understand the name of the character and their emotional behavior, but having a physical visual of them, no way.
> I can't remember if they have colors or they are colorful?
> Thanks for a very entertaining read and take care and have a good one, Helen.
Alx


 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
    Thank you for understanding the emotional nature of the characters, Alx. Also, really am honored by the rating, too.
    I'll consider how to increase the visual aspect more in the future.
    Blessings on all you do this week!

reply by krys123 on 14-Feb-2019
    You're very welcome, Helena glad you see a little bit Of the character development otherwise is perfect. Take care
    Alx
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Poor little guy -- kindof like Mr. Spock when he cried... :) ;) A very well-written installment here, Helen -- love the contrast you present between one completely over-whelmed with his own emotions when separated from the 'herd' and the one that is renewed and revitalized when he is able to share his emotions with his 'herd'! LOL! :) ;) Thanx for sharing and great job! ;) ;) Yvette


 Comment Written 10-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
    Thanks for your insightful review, Yvette! I appreciate you noting the contrast! Blessings on your week!
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Sounds like a nice place. Maybe a dream? Could there be such a planet where everyone was super cute and nice? I doubt it. How could they survive without fighting over limited resources?


 Comment Written 10-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
    Lol. Well, there was almost a war but we shall see how Peeztee survives this almost Eden inhabitants. Thanks for reviewing, Phyllis! Hugs!
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Poor Peeztee. It's scary being in an unfamiliar environment and around strangers no matter how friendly they are. I can understand preferring to be sanitized to being surrounded by the unknown.


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
    Thanks for your sympathetic review, Ron. Appreciate your understanding the character. Blessings!
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Hi Helen. I enjoyed this chapter of your book. I think it may be in the wrong book, though. Remove it and put it in the correct book. If you need help with this let me know and I'll try to walk you through it. Marilyn


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Marilyn! I finally figured it out! Thanks so much for your supportive review! Hugs!
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I am enjoying this book very much. It has lots of emotional reaction by the little creatures and I am beginning to catch on to their language. I still find this a fun read and look forward to the next chapter about this strange place.


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Sasha! Now I'll have to ride this chapter out until I can put it in the right book. Sigh.
    Appreciate you! Hugs!

reply by Sasha on 09-Feb-2019
    Disable it and then put it into the book you want.

reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
    Yes! Done. Thanks, Sasha! Whew! I really felt like a dunce with this mess. Lol.

reply by Sasha on 10-Feb-2019
    Don't feel bad about it, it happens to all of us.
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This is a very cute script you have penned about Peeztee feels. You used very good descriptive words and very good dialogue. I do not know how you can write these and make such good sense. Very good job my friend! Blessings, Teri


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
    Thank you so much, Teri! I messed up by putting it in the wrong book and will have to figure out if it can be changed. Thanks for the kind support! Hugs!
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Helen,

Strange and odd things happening on this distant planet of yours. *smile* And... perhaps here, too...

I don't mean to tell you what to do or how to handle your portfolio, dear, but I think you posted this to the wrong book -- recheck?

Thanks!



 Comment Written 09-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
    Yes, I blew it, Robyn. I usually check as to what book I'm posting to but I guess I just did add chapter and it went to the last book I was writing to. Do you have any words of wisdom how to move a chapter from one book to another?
    Thanks!!

reply by robyn corum on 09-Feb-2019
    I think so. Go to your portfolio - to books. Find the book of words. At the bottom, you'll see a small little box with the top three (or maybe even just the first chapter) listed three times.

    Beside those, you'll see an option to 'remove this' or something like that.

    Click on the correct chapter to remove it.

    THEN when it's separate and alone look for it in the list in your portfolio. You should see an option to 'Add this to a book.'

    The only question will be whether you will be able to do all of this today. Tom has some weird rules about adding and deleting. If you have already posted two things today, you MAY have to wait til tomorrow. (??) You can try it and see it it works. Good luck!

reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
    I think I'll ask for Tom's help because I already tried the disable and the remove and ended up removing the first chapter of the other book. Palm to Head!

reply by robyn corum on 09-Feb-2019
    No - don't disable!

reply by robyn corum on 09-Feb-2019
    That's when you're looking at the individual chapters. No, no.

    Look at the WHOLE BOOK in your portfolio.

    When you're looking at the whole book, it shows a little box at the bottom with three chapters highlighted at the bottom. I can send you an email photo of what I'm talking about.

reply by robyn corum on 09-Feb-2019
    And if you did disable a post, for SURE you won't be able to do anything else today. For some reason FS thinks disabling a post EQUALS creating one. Go figure.

reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
    Oh! Thanks for that warning!
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