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....This is an Octopus poem....

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Debra White
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Richard :)
Interesting format - gonna have a go at one of these I think!
Particularly liked the lines with internal rhyme (lines 3&7)
Romances bland? How so?! (Just out of interest)
That octopus is a bit scary looking - looks like something out of Star Trek!
Best wishes, Debra :)


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
    Debs,

    Yes what is a bland romance.

    Was 8, on Tenby beach, hot Sat afternoon, a young couply next to each other, he his hand up her blouse.

    Am 8!
    What's going on there?

    A bland romance!

    Don't have a pic of the octopus, so got this off FS art stuff.

    Cheers, Richard.

reply by Debra White on 14-Feb-2019
    Thanks for the explanation!
    I've been to Tenby beach many times when I was young - we always seemed to holiday in Wales!
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A punchy, vibrant day at the beach! Lots of activity going on here in your new invention, the octopus poem! He he he! This is a lot of fun, and maybe some metre might help to bring it all together? But it has all the attractions of a great day out, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 13-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
    Thanks Dolly.

    Re metre, I find this hard, so prefer free verse, and a focus on a message.
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Hi Richard,

Ha ha - octopus poem - love it!

Great poem and author notes.

Very nicely done! Nothing to suggest you improve upon.

Thanks for sharing,

Jan


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    Thanks for your comments.
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