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100 word flash fiction story

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BeasPeas
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Hi Tracey. I see you placed in the contest with this flash fiction. I am surmising from the ending that this isn't a romance at all but a dermatological problem that has been solved. Loved the image to accompany. She looks pretty happy. Marilyn


 Comment Written 16-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
    Thanks Marilyn.

    I was very surprised to see this win anything to be honest with you. lol
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Excellent flash fiction here, Trimple. I can easily see how you scored so well in the contest. It is a very clever piece of writing. Bless you. Bob


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Dear Mr. Mastery

    I don't know when you read this shorty, but it came in second to Humpwhistle! LOL

    I was so shocked that this crap did so well. It certainly doesn't say much about the committee who voted for it.

    You use the word 'vague' to describe this story, but I wonder if you could elaborate a little more?

    I will keep trying, Mr. Mastery. but with a review like that, you're hardly any help are you. Lol

    much love

    tracey

reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Dear Mr. Mastery I don't know when you read this shorty, but it came in second to Humpwhistle! LOL I was so shocked that this crap did so well. It certainly doesn't say much about the committee who voted for it.

    You use the word 'vague' to describe this story, but I wonder if you could elaborate a little more? I will keep trying, Mr. Mastery. but with a review like that, you're hardly any help are you. It's a bit like watching a 1947 movie and describing it as 'a bit black and white. Lol

    much love tracey

reply by Mastery on 13-Apr-2019
    You have my sincere apology, Trimple. I accidentally gave you the review intended for a completely different piece of work. Highly unusual, I grant you. I feel bad about this and will go back in and see if i can correct tmy review and stares. Please, please forgive me. Bob

reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Dear Bob

    Mmm...

    You were pretty specific about this piece the first time around, ie the blackhead n all... how could you have confuzzled this with another? lol

    Mind you, we all suffer the odd brain fart, I grant you :)

    I really should look at some of your work as I know you to be quite the storyteller.

    I'd be interested to read how you would have written a 100 word story about a blackhead actually. :)


    much love

    tracey

reply by Mastery on 13-Apr-2019
    Hi, Tracy. Just trust me. The entire review was meant for something and someone else. Please leave it at that. I have apologized. If you will check my folio for the past 14 years, you will see, I not only have written a lot of thos e100 word pieces (and 75 word) etc, but also have won a slew of contests. Go ahead and look and Bless you my sweet friend. Bob
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I love this surprise story. You had me totally fooled until the end. This, plus impeccable writing and my hatred of those ugly, black holes that I've had in my face, made this a stunning creation, IMO. No wonder you did well in the contest.


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You are very adept at the art of the surprise, as I didn't.see that one coming. Very intriguing 100 Word flash fiction. Reminds me of Dr. Pimple Popper on cable TV.


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2019


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Ha ha aha ha, you make me laugh, you do. I was imagining maybe this would turn out to be something like a rat, or something, but a blackhead? Never in my wildest. You've gotta love a writer who can anthropomorphise a blackhead to the extent where I feel sorry for it. Good luck in the contest, I'd vote for this. It's very original.


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
    Somebody had to do it, Emma :)

    I recently watched a YouTube clip on cystic acne. You know what it's like, you start watching a clip on how to fold a fancy napkin and end up finding out how to rear your very own three-legged camel on a budget...

    Gawd knows why, but I was stuck there for about ten minutes! lol

    Some people love squeezing blackheads and spots. Some, like my hubby, Ash, find nothing more rewarding that peeling a scab off, whereas, my sister, Jayne, was all for prizing out the tiniest hairs from her belly when she was pregnant. :)

    Cheers for the review, Emma :)
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The reveal in this wee gem is hilariously gross! You led me down a wrong track then yecch it is a story about a black head. This is a perfectly crafted story of great skill.


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
    He he. Glad you enjoyed this one, Lisa. Somebody had to do it! :)

    Cheers you.

    kind regards

    tracey
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I must admit you had the key element of flash fiction, misdirection, going on in droves in this little delight. It's got all the story elements and that blackhead character was dispatched neatly.

A fine write and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee.

Gloria


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
    Thank you :)
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You're so funny! I was ready for a surprise ending even though you got me thinking about an unhappy couple then poof the neglected husband is just a blackhead. Thank you for the fun surprise!


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
    Glad that you enjoyed this. :)
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Certainly original! A story from the point of view of a blackhead. That would have to be a first. Cleverly constructed so that the denouement is a complete surprise. This one should grab the attention of the judges!


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
    He he he. Somebody had to do it, Tony :)

    Thanks for the review

    kind regards

    tracey
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Blackheads, cold or canker sores, acne, warts, Eczema and, yes, sometimes even boils depending upon the severity of the bacterial infection involved...are all unsightly skin afflictions that need addressing.
I found it interesting you gave the blackhead a "voice" in your story, adding personification to the mix.
Your story has a definite beginning, a conflict and a resolution, as required.
Good luck,
~Dean


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2019



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Dean :)

reply by Dean Kuch on 19-Feb-2019
    You're welcome. -- :)
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