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A story of mutilation. 150 words

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I liked this story a lot, short and creative. Seemed like a horror story and read like one till the end. Very cool to see what can be done with such few words.


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
    Thank you, Nowhereman. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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Crikey! This was hilarious! I loved the surprise ending. I almost balked at reading this because I'm not one for gore, but I'm glad I stuck it through. Great use of flash fiction writing succinct-ness. (Is that a word?)


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Congratulations on winning the Flash Fiction contest. I admired the drama and sound effects and the unexpected ending. You certainly had me going with the details of mutilation! Well done- Joan


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
    Thank you, Joan. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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Impeccable writing, Humpwhistle; great, grisly story. I take it we won't be hearing your recipe on the food channel. Congratulations on your win. You deserve it.


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
    Thanks so much, shaffer40. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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This is a great flash fiction and hearty congratulations on your win. I twigged early in the story that there was going to be a 'catch' but it didn't detract at all from the pleasure of reading this.


 Comment Written 23-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
    Thanks so much, JudyE. Yes, all Flash stories are subject to twist or irony. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.


 Comment Written 22-Mar-2019


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    Thank you, Committee!
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Hello, Humpwhistle :)
I loved this almost as much as actual coleslaw!
Enjoyable for horror and food enthusiasts alike - you wrote it well (and I almost got a recipe out of it too!)
I love the head wobbling on the sacrificial oaken block - great imagery!
A fun an entertaining read - Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra :)


 Comment Written 28-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Debra. I'm a big fan of coleslaw, too. Horror is not my thing, but the 'head' misdirection was too good to pass up.
    Actually, that is my recipe--but I add toasted caraway seeds, and sometimes substitute half-sour pickle juice for the vinegar.
    Glad you enjoyed. Thank you again. Peace, Lee

reply by Debra White on 28-Feb-2019
    Sounds tasty :) Hungry now!
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This is excellent and very, very clever. I like the way you begin this little grisly tale. It does appear that this man is lopping off heads. You keep us engaged and in suspense until the very end. I applaud you Humpwhistle on presenting and bringing forth this well written poem. Very well done!


 Comment Written 26-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
    Thank you, Jeffrey. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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OK, I've been away too long and this is the first FS post I've read in well over a year, maybe longer. So, I let my guard down and you suckered me right in. I was in a "lab" somewhere with that white coated head basher, thinking maybe he was doing some medical research, albeit not too neatly. Then, my thoughts turned to disgust. Then, to thinking I should make some coleslaw to accompany a nice piece of salmon for dinner tonight. I should have known, remembered, that you would take me on a delightfully diversionary path to find the truth and the humor. Very well done!


 Comment Written 26-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Judy, and welcome back! You've been away too long. I expect you'll be much more difficult to gull next time. I caught you when your guard was down. But I'm delighted you enjoyed . . . and I haven't spoiled coleslaw for you. You got any of that salmon left? A little fresh dill on the salmon, and some in the coleslaw ...

    So good to hear from you. And thanks so much for the 6. Peace, Lee

reply by Judy Swanson on 26-Feb-2019
    Dill on both - you betcha!
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Really solid work on this piece, Lee. Quite a bang flash story that I didn't see coming. Good luck in the contest.

Unfulfilled, he --Not that it really matters but there is an extra space here. Word count looks good.

Take care,
Russell


 Comment Written 26-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
    Thanks so much, Russell. I'm glad I snuck this one past you. One never knows if you're giving away too much, or not enough. Glad you enjoyed. Thanks again, Lee
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