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Heads Will Roll


A story of mutilation. 150 words

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Oh My, Of course we expect the worse when we read something like this. I was almost afraid to read the gorier details, wondering why a warning was not available.I was not ready for the Last line. HAHAHA Well done Lee. Nancy:)


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Nancy. I was leery of the gruesome innuendo, too. But, without that misdirection, all I had was a guy preparing cabbage salad. I'm guessing a few people quit reading before getting to the punch line. Can't say I blame them. Actually, a warning might have served as another misdirection--but that might have been a ruse that cost me readers.
    I'm glad you stuck with it, Nancy. Peace, Lee
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This is very good. You certainly keep me guessing, I was getting a little worried, and I was very relieved to find it was coleslaw. Best of luck in the contest.
Elaine


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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
    Thanks so much, Elaine. So for leading you down the wrong path, but I hope you enjoyed the reveal. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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Oh barf! I had to go back and re-read to make sure I understood your meaning. This recipe could be re-worded lol! You wouldn't get folks trying this recipe any time soon, I'm afraid. Now I'll hesitate ever eating coleslaw again.

Best wishes in this contest. You have the horror factor going for you with this one. I doubt anyone coult top this.

Joy xx


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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Joy. I'm sorry I ruined coleslaw for you. But it was just a ruse. It was about cabbage heads all the time. I just had to make it seem like something else because Flash Fiction is all about a 'surprise' at the end. Really, no human heads were involved. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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You are cruel Lee, I was expecting a Hanjibal-like, or even a less tame Dean Kuch work. But you did a brilliant surprise ending to your enthralling thriller...blah! Coleslaw. Well done Lee, good luck, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
    Thanks, Roy. Cruel to cabbage, I suppose. You know how it is with Flash--it's all about the misdirection. Gore isn't part of my repertoire. I'm glad you enjoyed the reveal. Thanks again. Peace, Lee

reply by royowen on 25-Feb-2019
    Well done
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Ha! I have your recipe now!

As usual with a good one of these, I had to go back to re-read with ALL of the information available. I guess, I was always looking for that parallel meaning once you left interpretation open with that first line.

Anyway, well done. You can't get a more final twist than leaving it ti the very last word.

Steve


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
    Ha, Yourself! Shows how much you know--I left the lightly toasted caraway seeds out of my secret recipe . . . oh, crap!

    Thank you, Steve. I think I need to lay off the Flash for a while. Too many readers are onto my tricks. But I was chopping a head of cabbage when the idea popped into my head. Too synergistic to pass up.

    Actually, Flash is a little more like poetry than prose--in the importance of precise word selection.

    Another coleslaw tip--try using pickle juice instead of vinegar--but cut back a bit on the sugar.

    Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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This was so well-done, Lee, that I needed to read fast to find out what you were REALLY cleaving here!! My mind (vis a vis your words, you bad man, you!) were conjuring up such vivid images! Awesome work here!! I loved it.


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Rachelle Allen, twice. First, for falling for my gory misdirection, second, for hanging in to the tasty end. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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If you aren't the clever one! I read the first sentence and thought ugh, I can't read this, but then I thought of your last cute post, and read on. I wonder how many females do the same thing. The "red head" was wonderfully misleading.
All in all a great flash fiction entry. Good luck.
Katharine - pome lover



 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Katharine, for giving me the benefit of the doubt. I wonder how many readers fell too hard for my misdirection? In a way, I can't blame them. But they missed out on a great coleslaw recipe. Wimps! Just kidding. Sometimes misdirection can backfire. Glad you stuck with it. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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Hahahahaha, Lee, you clever you. Yeah, red an white cabbage heads would make a lovely mix on the big slap of wood. This is just wonderfully thought out and good luck. I loved it. All best. Ulla:))))


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Ulla. Actually, I was preparing coleslaw when this idea popped into my head. It was a head to head collaboration.
    Sometimes, the simplest chores spark the brightest ideas. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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I know your work well enough to know that you weren't talking about a human body. I knew you would have a twist, but I never came up with coleslaw. LOL Once again you did a wonderful job of writing. Good luck.


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
    Thank you, Barbara. Yeah, anyone familiar with my stories wouldn't expect me to write gore. Several readers were suspicious. Still, most were surprised by coleslaw. Glad you enjoyed. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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OMGsh!!! Yuk! But, of course that is exactly what's it's supposed to be. . .so well done. I'm sure this piece will do well in the contest. I'm sure you had a good time writing this piece. I keep thinking where my brain would go to write something like this and I'm not sure if I would be as successful.


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
    Thank you, moongirlwriter. But 'yuk' is right. I never write gore, so this almost grossed me out--even though I knew I was writing about cabbage. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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