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a whole lot of white noise....

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I followed this story through every tiny element of someone waking, walking twenty feet, stepping outside for a tick, then eventually returning to unconsciousness. The only thing missing is nine hours of Fanstory review.


 Comment Written 15-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
    Yeah, I didn't want to tax him too much...
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White noise indeed but, as you say, we were warned. I kept waiting for something to happen but nothing did. At least the expectation kept me reading. lol

Just two small points: 'around a around a minute' - needs a word or two deleted.

'He stripped off his pant, socks' - did you intend to make 'pant' singular?


 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    a lot of folk were expecting something to happen but hey, that's life! lol
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Hi G. Great job on this astounding "white noise" story. Makes me glad NOT to have a man around the house. See--that's the problem with marriage--all the romance flies out the window. (I know your character is living alone--thank goodness for some poor female.) One day much like another. That aside, your short story is very well done. Marilyn


 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    Not far off a typical day for some of us!
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I guess you've managed to show what a good writer you areG. By writing about an incredibly boring day in the life of an incredibly boring person, who laughs at his own jokes. A really good descriptive episode,. A very good one, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : Sloshed the tea bag (around a around) a minute


 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    Many thanks Roy. G

reply by royowen on 14-Mar-2019
    OK G
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OMG, it's like the story of my husband had he not met and married me. LOL! One typo:

"Once in the kitchen, he boiled the kettle, stuffed a teabag in a rinsed-out cup and run water over last night's teaspoon."

To remain consistent with past tense, "run" should be "ran."


 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    Too true for a lot of folk. lol
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Ahhhhh, yes.....the white noise....hmmm, I'm pretty sure you wrote that whole thing just so you could use that name as a hook....LOL!! You could put a real warning on it.....something like "content avoidable...just get a life!" :) Thanx for sharing your musings today, G. ;) ;)


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    Yep, that's exactly why I wrote it. i'm kind of surprised most folk read it! lol
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I thought it was great. Plenty of personality in this one, if not the personality or character that you would want to live with, exactly. But a snapshot of a life, someone stuck in a routine, a lonely routine. We see this guy obviously used to being by himself, with no-one to chide him for his idiosynchrosies, and he has gotten used to chucking his snot filled tissue onto the carpet, not cooking his food right, using sour milk, and slamming the door in the postman's face. It's funny, but it is a darker kind of comedy, a little sad. But you did a great job in crafting it and bringing out all those aforementioned elements in the prose. It is polished up and in your face, the kind of writing I like. Unique and well crafted, with imagination. estory


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    I've had days just like this. lol Many thanks as always. G
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Cheers, Mr. G:
> Your typical autobiographical day, hey? Chuckle!
> It's one of those bad hair days right from the start, But I just wonder you like that all the time, now that he's retired.
>I most demonstratively definitive description of a negative behavioral active tendencies that snowball into an irritable doldrum, only to be repeated the next day. Talk about a living hell!
>"Bloodied hippies" a little problem with them, hey? One yourself, one day or maybe a loved one? Chuckle! I wonder being a hippie, like myself one day, would make me a hippie today?
>Good piece of writing of a mono-expressionistic characters behavior at looking at the world around him and possibly within him.
> Thanks a lot for very entertaining read and take care and have a good one.
Alx


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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    I'm going to do this tomorrow I think. G
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That was very clever, and the imagery was ... let me just say, riveting! I've known men like this fellow, and they were happy! Can you believe it? LOL. I adored the title, that was ingenious, and your story was exactly that, a full day doing bugger all! LOL.

Well done, I enjoyed your bit of warped humour! LOL. :)) Sandra xx


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    To be honest, I was just taking the piss with this....

reply by sandramitchell on 14-Mar-2019
    LOL, LOL, LOL!!! You are incorrigible!! LOL!!!
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This is different from your normal work, but relatable. It's funny how we get in a routine and seem to stick to it no matter. Creatures of habit I supose. It's well-written, very descriptive, your character really came to life.


 Comment Written 11-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    I don't think I have 'normal work'. I tend to write along themes for a while and then change it up. Cheers G

reply by Mistydawn on 14-Mar-2019
    True that. Taking a trip into aberrant territory is what makes your work so tantalizing.
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