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Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "River Rising"

First the war...the marshal

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Shirley McLain
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Long chapter to read but it was good. I enjoy reading a good western. I did find one paragraph that needs something.

I ate pemmican with water from the canteen. Riding west I encountered four five riders. Rebs, they were, but jist trying to get home. We'd seen the same action; a farmer. We're ragged, hungry, and just plain tired.

These sentences do not read smoothly. The pemmican comment was just thrown in. Doesn't seem to go with the rest. he encountered the four Rebs trying to get home. Was the farmer the action they seen? The contraction is We are ragged, hungry and just plain tired. Should that contraction be "They were ragged........
Have a great rest of your day.

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    Shirley, than you for the review and the constructive comments. I will give them serious consideration. Thank you, Catherin
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Randa Dayle
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Nice story, I like the time frame. Westerns are sooo cooo!

Is this a typo?
One of the other rider's yells at me, "Their Injuns!" "They're Injuns!'

That's the only thing I noticed to improve on.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
    Thank you, Randy for your review and the excellent rating. I'll check on the inquiry you made; and make the necessary corrections. Thank you! Catherin
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