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Night of the Round Table - Part 2


the fiction half

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Comma needed between adjectives -- "...invalid(,) crabby..."

Quotation mark needed: (")So let's see..."

What on earth could I possibly write in my review that would be of any use, other than to say I bow to a master author?


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Thank you so much for all three of these wonderful, kind, ego-boosting, thorough (who reads three stories, two of which are really long, and reads them so thoroughly that she notices a missing comma 4/5 of the way through the second one?) reviews! I can't tell you how much it made my Saturday to wake up to these.

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 13-Apr-2019
    And I can't tell you, Mark, how much your reply means to me!
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It's nice to see prayer and faith as the answer, even if it came from you alcohol induced bad dream. My faith holds me together and drives me forward in this crazy world. My experience with my mother-in-law felt like a bad dream from which I longed to arouse from. Towards the end, Mom was having a real bad time and I was trying to make her comfortable. She looked at me and said, "I am okay...everything is going to be okay." She passed two days later...

I am glad you can see the humor in your own circumstances, as I do. We laughed a lot towards the end, too. You have to.

All my best,
Sal :+)


 Comment Written 22-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
    Thanks for the review and the understanding.
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Mark, this is a wonderful story and I can't wait to read the second part. It is active, your characters are strong and the dialogue terrific. I think the storyline is astounding. If I could give you a 10 I would. I am very impressed which doesn't have to mean anything to you. Have a great night. Shirley


 Comment Written 20-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
    What a wonderful review - thanks so much - thanks too, for taking the time to read these longer-than-average stories - much appreciated.
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Hi, Mark. Bravo! You actually deserve six stars for this part too. But alas and alack I have to share you know. (wink)

I absolutely loved this story. Excerpts like this were captivating:

"The conversation continued like this. I was the proverbial kid in a candy shop. Or maybe I was the proverbial guy trying to take a drink from a fire hydrant. All I know is that, whatever proverb I was inhabiting, I was loving it. The banter was witty, pretentious, irreverent, and sarcastic. The drinking was intense. These were all things I was pretty good at. I had begun to let myself imagine that there actually might be a place for me in this exclusive club, when the door behind me opened."

This one should easily pull off story of the Month or my name is not Bob


 Comment Written 18-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
    Thanks so much for the kind words, Bob. I don't often write these longer, non-humor pieces, so it's nice to have this one validated by a professional.

reply by Mastery on 20-Mar-2019
    I don't know about the pro part. LOL
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Hi Mark, I really enjoyed the second part of your story. It was fun, and fantastical, to sit in on the conversation you were having with the famous folks at the round table. Congrat's for making the cut! lol


 Comment Written 18-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read both parts of this really long story - I very much appreciate it.
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I really liked this read, Mark. It had a good flow to it and the I loved the way you wrote for the characters at the Round Table. I really felt like I was there. Nice job.


 Comment Written 17-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read both parts of this really long story - I very much appreciate it.

reply by 24chas on 20-Mar-2019
    It was written so well, I didn't even notice the length of it.
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Ha, what a study in contrasts with the SS agent in the trench-coat needed to use the facilities shortly. That is testimony to the sheer genius of the fiction mind.

Oh and how nice to see the usual suspects at the round table. Dorothy Parker and Harpo Marx a certain recipe for success -- vicious circle a most apt name.

Ha, great line about writers. Oh so Mark Valentine is the ghost writer of Hamilton. Who knew? You pose a most interesting question about plagiarism occurring ninety years before it is written. My guess is some smart lawyer will make that happen.

Ha, returning the London Fog raincoat is a touch of genius, proving once and for all the deep honesty of your Mark Valentine character. Tis in adversity true character is revealed.

Very much enjoyed your piece. And what was even more appealing is the final section of the fiction part could aptly be applied to either. Lessons were learned.

Super writing and a most interesting story.

Gloria














 Comment Written 17-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
    Thanks, Gloria for taking the time to read both parts of this really long story - I very much appreciate it. Thanks also for the kind comments. They mean a lot coming fro a writer of your caliber.
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I looked up the top and saw general fiction. Well done with this one, I still don't know who Dorothy Day. (But I know Doris Day, heh heh) I enjoyed this story oh aspiring writer, I loved this though. I was always think the measure of a story is the absorbtion in the story, and you had that from me. Well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : Or (simple) sit in the presence of God. Simply?


 Comment Written 17-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read both parts of this really long story - I very much appreciate it. Dorothy Day was sort of an American version of Mother Teresa. Thanks also for pointing out the typo.

reply by royowen on 20-Mar-2019
    Well done,
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well, I bet your kids would love this if they read it today. Would you send the whole thing to them?
And another question. If you decided to write a play, what would it be about?
And an observation: (a repeat) - I think you could BE a successful writer making big bucks if you wanted to. Why not develop this story and (that nasty word you don't like) submit?
So you're 59.
Please - I just want to encourage you because I believe in you!
(and I haven't been drinking)
Katharine - pome


 Comment Written 17-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
    Katharine - Thanks so much for the encouragement - it means a lot.
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I kind of understood what was going on here - that you have yourself in some kind of time warp allowing you to plagiarise a twenty-first century musical all un beknownst to an early twentieth century group of literati. I suppose it amounts to my gate crashing a meeting of th bloomsbury group, but being a Brit perhaps I should have let this one alone.

Please accept my apologies for taking the 80 cent bounty under false pretences.

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 Comment Written 17-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
    Jim, anyone who made it through both halves of this lengthy posts deserves much more than the paltry 80 cents per half. I think the Bloomsbury group is the perfect frame of reference fro which to understand the Algonquin Round Table.
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