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Remembering Brooke (adewpearl)


Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Once a Generation"

a collection of posts honoring a friend

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A good poem that rhymes. Thank you for explaining the steeds being plural. I thought it should be plural as well. I did wonder if pull needed to be pulled, though.
Comment made on 3-19-19 by called2rite.


 Comment Written 18-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
    Hello Called2rite. Thank you for the wonderful comments. I tried to emulate Brooke's style in this poem, for it is one I am fond of myself. She had a great influence and was a wonderful encouragement for me and others. I didn't use "pulled" because I wanted present tense which is used in that stanza. Brooke was, indeed, a dew pearl.
    Robert

reply by called2rite on 20-Mar-2019
    Thanks Robert for the explanation. I am not very knowledgable about poems, so my comments are made on what I notice and see. I see where you are coming from with the word pull now. Thanks again.
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This is a beautiful tribute to Brooke. I never made her acquaintance here. From everything that I've read, she was a wonderful person and a very skilled writer. Thanks for sharing this superbly written tribute. Well done!


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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
    Hello Jeffrey. Thank you for the marvelous comments. I tried to emulate Brooke's style in this poem, for it is one I am fond of myself. She had a great influence and was a wonderful encouragement for me and others. She was, indeed, a dew pearl.
    Robert
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-Beautiful image and very nice
presentation, Robert.
-Your notes are appreciated;
I know Brooke would like them,
as well as your poem.
-This is a tribute that
comes from your heart.
-Through the images you
show how much she meant to you
as a friend on FS.
-She would like the idea of
the carriage pulled by steeds, I think,
as well as trotting down "fields of dandelion."
-My favorite part is the last two lines;
they say so much without telling it.
-Thanks for sharing your poem, and
the Wordsworth quote, too.


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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
    Hello Pam. Thank you for the marvelous comments. I'm pleased that you think Brooke would like the poem. I tried to emulate Brooke's style in this poem, for it is one I am fond of myself. She had a great influence and was a wonderful encouragement for many on this site. Thanks for mentioning the Wordsworth quote, it seems to sum up the feelings perfectly. Brookee was, indeed, a dew pearl.
    Robert

reply by Pam (respa) on 19-Mar-2019
    You are very welcome, Robert, and thanks for sharing your thoughts. You did a good job with the form; and she was a great influence on the site in so many ways. You are welcome for the mention of the "Wordsmith," and yes, she was "a [rare], dew pearl."
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Robert,

Oh, my. I almost have no words -- and if you knew me, you'd know what a terrific statement that is. *smile* This is brilliant. On the order of the great classics, my friend. The family will adore it! Thank you beyond utterance!



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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
    Hello Robyn. No words! That'll be the day, as Buddy Holly once sang. Besides, I like your words.
    Thank you, my friend, for the splendid comments. I tried to emulate Brooke's style a bit in this poem, for it is one I am fond of myself. She had a great influence and was a wonderful encouragement for me, even though I was only on the site for about four months before she became ill. We talked of the Valley Forge Music Fair, where we both went to hear great popular music, from Peter, Paul and Mary to Harry Chapin. She was, indeed, a dew pearl.
    I hope her family is comforted, knowing how much she was loved on this site.
    Thank you for making the book!
    Robert
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I didn't know her at all, I'm not sure I read any of her poetry, though I'm sure I must have. Lots of people did because when I went to her page to see if I had read her, I saw her last work got like 130 review. I'm thrilled if I get 15. So she must have been special. This is a very nice tribute to her. We are losing too many FanStorians these days.


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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
    Hello Roxanna. Thank you for the wonderful comments. I tried to emulate Brooke's style in this poem, for it is one I am fond of myself. She had a great influence and was a wonderful encouragement for me and others. She was, indeed, a dew pearl.
    As to the reviews, one of the best ways to get reviews is to get fans (by fanning others) who will be notified when you post, and, of course, to put enough money on the posts. There were also many more members who reviewed back then.
    Robert
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Brooke would love the easy cadence of your quateains and the natural use of ABCB rhyme. I can visualize her as a passenger in that carriage eyeing those dandelions in the fields and the constellations amidst the stars. A lovely tribute! Rod


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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
    Hello Rod. Thank you for the marvelous comments. I tried to emulate Brooke's style in this poem, for it is one I am fond of myself. She had a great influence and was a wonderful encouragement for me, even though I was only on the site for about four months before she became ill. We talked of the Valley Forge Music Fair, where we both went to hear great popular music, from Peter, Paul and Mary to Harry Chapin. She was, indeed, a dew pearl.
    Robert

reply by RodG on 19-Mar-2019
    You are very welcome. Rod
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Delightful look at the fields of blooms. Of course makes me think of "I wandered lonely as a cloud..." We had to learn that in school and I do still love it. Not sure I understand why "pull" must be singular. It seems you started a new thought?? Well, you've looked into it and are satisfied. I've done poems in the rhythms of "Field of Daffodils" - can't miss with that rhythm. "a poet who's inside" - great line - and the quote by Wordsworth right on. Really lovely poem.


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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Hello Gail. Thank you for the marvelous comments. I tried to emulate Brooke's style a bit in this poem, for it is one I am fond of myself. She had a great influence and was a wonderful encouragement for me, even though I was only on the site for about four months before she became ill. We talked of the Valley Forge Music Fair, where we both went to hear great popular music, from Peter, Paul and Mary to Harry Chapin. She was, indeed, a dew pearl.

    In the sentence you mentioned, 'Steeds' is the subject, 'pull' the verb and 'carriage' the direct object (since it receives the action). thus, steeds pull the carriage.

    Robert
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That was a perfect poem for a beautiful soul now writing her poetry in Heaven. She made a huge impact on Fanstory with her lovely poems and the lessons she taught us from her reviews and her classes. Your poem would delight her, you've captured the soul of a lady who wrote from her heart about the simple things in life. As your title aptly puts, once in a generation our world is blessed by one such as her. Well done, my friend, this was a beautiful tribute. Sandra xxx


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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Hello Sandra. Thank you for the splendid review and comments. I tried to emulate Brooke's style a bit in this poem, for it is one I am fond of myself. She had a great influence and was a wonderful encouragement for me and many others, even though I was only on the site for about four months before she became ill. We talked of the Valley Forge Music Fair, where we both went to hear great popular music, from Peter, Paul and Mary to Harry Chapin. She was, indeed, a dew pearl.
    Robert
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What an imaginatively poignant premise your poetic dedication to Brooke Baldwin's memory conveys, Robert. That once a generation, a horse-drawn carriage to the heavens slows it's pace in tribute when a very special individual resides within.
A smooth, even meter coupled with your abcb rhyme scheme provide the reader with a delightful reading experience and your presentation is top notch as always.
Brooke will be sorely missed by many.
Well done...
~Dean


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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Hello Dean. Thank you for the marvelous comments. I tried to emulate Brooke's style a bit in this poem, for it is one I am fond of myself. She had a great influence and was a wonderful encouragement for me and many others, even though I was only on the site for about four months before she became ill. We talked of the Valley Forge Music Fair, where we both went to hear great popular music, from Peter, Paul and Mary to Harry Chapin. She was, indeed, a dew pearl.
    Robert

reply by Dean Kuch on 19-Mar-2019
    Yes, Brooke Baldwin was definitely something special.
    My pleasure, Robert.
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One of many tribute poems to a fallen friend. I really like the direction you took with this - almost reflecting the Norse Valkyries who chose the most noble who died in battle and led their souls to Valhalla.... the whole idea of the carriage ride to "heaven" brought back that same feel to me.

Love the basic idea and well-executed.

Bill (WildWithWords)


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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
    Hello Bill. Thank you for the wonderful comments. I tried to emulate Brooke's style in this poem, for it is one I am fond of myself. I was actually channeling Emily Dickinson, Because I could not stop. Brooke had a great influence and was a wonderful encouragement for me and others. She was, indeed, a dew pearl.
    Robert
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