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First rendezvous


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jenintorre
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This is a lovely, romantic poem. I really enjoyed reading it. I loved the imagery and the well chosen artwork and presentation. Nice one. Best wishes. Jen.


 Comment Written 03-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
    Thank you very much
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jenintorre
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This is a lovely, romantic poem. I really enjoyed reading it. I loved the imagery and the well chosen artwork and presentation. Nice one. Best wishes. Jen.


 Comment Written 03-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
    Thank you very much.
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Hi Sanku,

This is a really beautiful love poem with such a happy ending. :-)

One suggestion: You might want to increase the contrast between text and background. We have several visually impaired and many elder members who may have difficulty seeing your beautiful verse. A white shade might look nice ...

Thanks for sharing your work. Jan


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
    Thank you very much for this suggestion. I have changed the text to white

reply by HealingMuse on 02-Apr-2019
    Hi Sanku,

    I've made the same errors and from what people have told me, those reviewing on iPhones have more trouble reading text with low contrast than those on computers or tablets. I'm glad to know you found my review helpful. Jan :-)
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What a wonderfully romantic poem this truly is, Santha. Ypou manage to create a mood with your words and then assure the reader that it was not all for naught. Bravo, my friend! Bob


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
    Thanks a lot ,Bob.
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This is so sweet! Nothing more satisfying than knowing that if you had it all to do over again - you still would. Not many relationships can stand the test of time. When you have one - treasure it. Thanks for sharing these lovely sentiments.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
    Thank you very much.
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-I like the image
and presentation, Sanku.
-The imagery is vivid
and paints a word
picture of the scene.
-A moonlit night is
always good for romance.
-I like the ending lines, too.
-Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
    Thank you very much.

reply by Pam (respa) on 09-Apr-2019
    You are welcome.
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A very inviting and calming peace that symbolizes love and happiness. I like the blue background has a very calming effect. This poem reads well and is a delight to read and digest. Your images are clear and well described with your word choices, and the poem flows well. There is one error, "as we look into each others eyes," should be, "as we look into each other's eyes," with apostrophe (') s. Also "slap slapped" looks like a typo of repeated words--did you mean just slapped? There's also punctuation missing as you began punctuating then left it out half way down. So, some polishing is needed for it to shine. Otherwise, a very inviting and beautiful scene created! I'd be happy to adjust my review with revisions. Best,

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 Comment Written 01-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
    Thank you very much for this constructive review.I have made the changes .I have changed a line too.
    I am okay with 'good'.smile. ( I am writing for fun mainly .)
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Yours is a very romantic free verse, Sanku. I enjoyed reading it. The picture pairs nicely with your well-chosen words describing the 2 lovers. I like the color scheme, too. Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
    Thank you very much.
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A very well-written poem about two lovers that like to walk hand in hand on the beach. Since their first rendezvous there were many more and their seems to be still many more to come.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
    Thank you very much.
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This is beautiful, to remember those early years and still feel the same way about the love in your life is truly magical, your write is golden, best wishes, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2019



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    Thank you very much.
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