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Beauty Is Not Reality


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royowen
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I think the sheer ugliness of abuse, leaves it's ugly paw print on the psyches of many children, to bear and carry through life, even young boys are also forced to remember extremes of murdering not only innocence, but create a lifetime of joylesness. Beautifully writen friend Jimi, I abhor it, I have an extreme hatred Of it. Well done, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    Roy, another big thank you. The write was difficult but I intend to let others know, there is someone who will listen and they do not need to feel ashamed. Yes, my heart goes out to all victims of sexual abuse. if ever there was true evil in the world, it manifest in the very sick individuals who would inflict such a horrendous act on anyone, especially a child.. again a huge thank you

    jimi

reply by royowen on 12-Apr-2019
    I agree Jimi
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This is a strong piece of poetry. It grabs the attention of the reader from start to finish. A sad and gross state of affairs. How the innocence of a young child can be taken away by a lustful adult who thinks only of their own self satisfaction.
It also gives the reader a glimpse at hope and strength in not allowing such foul acts to destroy the soul but rise above it. Only the sinner will go to hell. Thank you for sharing this well written and expressive piece. Many great lines within this deep and descriptive write. I cannot help but shower a six. ~DD


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    PoemsodDD,

    Thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review this difficult work. I am honored and humbled by not only the rating but the encouraging words you have written. again than you..

    jlsavell

reply by PoemsOfDD on 13-Apr-2019
    You are most welcome. Thank you for sharing. ~DD
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Wow! This certainly darkened up my day. A terrific and absolutely confronting write. Thank God I am a bloke. The journey of self realisation is so well penned. Age does indeed beget wisdom, or should do - DJ


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    djsaxon, thank you for stopping by to read and review my work. I didn't mean to darken your day. Your words about self realisation are very true.. again a huge thank you


    jlsavell
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Intense poem. The imagery and metaphor and subtext. Yowie. So even though it doesn't have much rhyme (I like poems that rhyme), it is moving and speaks.


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    Aiona, again a huge thank you. I am more a free verse spirit, but I do understand many prefer rhyme. again thank you

    jlsavell
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This poem speaks the story of a little girl who at last experienced and learned beauty is not reality, moral of the story; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    ALCREATOR,
    How are you? Thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my work. I appreciate you...


    jlsavell
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Most interesting poem - and sad. To hide the past, the hurt, the pain is horrible - and yet try to be a model, someone to look up to . This person in the poem has lots of course. Hope so.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    thank you very much for stopping by to read and review. I am honored..

    jlsavell
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Why do we compare our faults to another's strengths? We have to live with the person in the mirror. It's who we really are. Thanks for you wonderful poem.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    Randa Dayle,

    thank you fro stopping by to read and review my work. I am honored

    jlsavell
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Welcome back--I was so pleased to see your name pop up on my screen!
Thank you for the courage to reflect in this free verse on your abuse and betrayal as a child. I am relieved that age brought a "depth of understanding". Here's to conquering the "demons"- Joan


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    Joan,

    how are you? Yes, I am back. I was reticent about coming back. My plate is full, but I needed to write as much as I need to breathe and to connect again with others.. thank you so much.

    tell me how you are..

    jimi

reply by Joan E. on 11-Apr-2019
    I understand the need to write and connect with others. My plate is as full as ever, and unfortunately my peripheral neuropathy has gotten worse, but I keep fighting. Hugs- Joan

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    I hate to hear this. I had hip replacement in November. My second one due to an injury. I took he last year to focus on family and getting back to Jimi. Best thing I have ever done.

    Can you tell me why you have neurothopy? I don?t mean to intrude.

reply by Joan E. on 11-Apr-2019
    I am sorry to hear you had to have a second hip replacement and hope you have healed well. I am pleased to hear that your focus on family has been so productive.

    My peripheral neuropathy is called idiopathic, because the doctors do not know what caused it (typically diabetes, chemotherapy or an injury). I keep trying medical and natural remedies and treatments to no avail. I just have to live long enough for science to make a breakthrough! Smiles- Joan
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That's so sad. It makes me wonder what's wrong with people. Little girls should have the lives they dream about. So sad that's rarely the case.


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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    Cindy Warren, thank you for stopping by to read and review my offering. Yes, it is sad and very tragic..

    again thank you
    jlsavell
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There are so many reasons I like this..To name a few...it flows easily as descriptive phrases that tell of this girl's secret of being abused and losing innocence, not by choice.
I love her emergence into a wise woman who knows her magazine dreams were not reality.
This poem will speak to people and deserves high praise.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    Tina, thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my offering. I am honored. It has been a while since I have posted anything and I am glad to have returned.. again thank you

    jlsavell

reply by Tina Crute on 11-Apr-2019
    Well, you came back
    with a bang, was my
    initial thought after
    reading your poem:)

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    You humble me

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
    You humble me

reply by Tina Crute on 11-Apr-2019
    Funny how truly grateful
    people will feel humbled
    when honored.
    My mom taught me to
    be grateful and it stuck,
    so I get the humbling
    feeling with compliments.
    I get
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