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The Passage of Time


words can never describe

  15 total reviews 
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DR DIP
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Wow Jimi, this poem is so powerful, heartfelt and very personal who those who have experienced such tragedy in the own lives can relate in your wonderful write You my friend are truly a wonderful wordsmith poet and friend

dip


 Comment Written 07-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
    Dip, your review is so appreciated. Writing is so very often cathartic. I am truly humbled over your high praise. Again thank you!

    Jimi
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Just lovely. The emotion and imagery transcends all thought, for we see what you see, and feel what you feel.
A journey through time that is both 100 years long as much a 100 seconds, for time has a way of hitting home a reality in which we are never prepared.
Once again a delicate delivery from a skilled writer that I love to bits.

Lovely to see you my dearest friend, and your poem of loss was unforced, clean as a mountain river, and as warm as the glow of any furnace.
My very best wishes.
Have a wonderful day.
RG


 Comment Written 20-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
    Roy, my beautiful friend,
    Your review is moving and it words pierce my heart with immense gratitude. thank you so very much..

    jimi
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OMG - This is so sad. I really wasn't expecting that ending and was going to tell you that it was as beautifully written as anything I've seen on a greeting card. Actually, if you shortened it and didn't have it end tragically, I'd say to try selling it to a greeting card company. Hugs, Lou


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
    Louise Michelle, thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my very personal work. I am honored..


    jlsavell
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Jimi, you never fail to please with your wonderful insight. I too lost a child however FS wasn't around then, so I suffered in silence, which all the shrinks tell us is destructive. If we want 'closure' we bare our soul to a stranger or find a great lady poet who put it all in perspective. Thank you Jimi, Love Anne


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
    Anne, you bring tears to my heart. I never knew, but then..there are many things we do not know about our friends..right? thank you so very much..

    on another note, I will be in your port to review as soon as I answer my reviews. I am terrible about this.

    again sweet friend, thank you so very much..

    jimi
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This was a beautiful and powerful write, JLSavell. What an awesome picture you painted of the relationship between a mother and a son and how cruelly fate ended the early one. Great job.


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
    24chas, another wonderful thank you for stopping by to review my very personal work. I know I must say it all the time, but I truly mean it..I am humbled and honored..

    jlsavell
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Up until the end it seems the story of a proud mother and her memories of his growing up and what he is doing now. But the last line seems to say this is all he didn't get to do because he died as a baby.

Keep writing

dragonpoet


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
    dragonpoet,
    thank you fro stopping by to read and review my work. It means a great deal to me

    jlsavell

reply by dragonpoet on 21-Apr-2019
    My pleasure.
    Joan
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Janice Canerdy
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This poem, which has me crying, is almost indescribably beautiful and
moving. Your superb specific details have indeed created the life that never was.


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
    Janice Canerdy,
    Another huge thank you for taking your time to read and comment on my very personal work. I am honored once again. Thank you so veery much..

    jlsavell
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Thanks for your commemorative writing - telling a tale that could be and yet is, to many. Jimi, you have wonderful eyes and a beautiful mind that's able to remember, imagine, and give - give us all a moment of remembrance and wonder ... and love.


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
    Cycler,
    This was a difficult write, as is often the case with me. Thank you dearest friend for many things, but most of all for your encouraging words to me about my work. It humbles me.. greatly.. jimi
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How true..Words can never describe the passage of time! What a great poem, I think that the picture you picked helps portray your poem well. Thanks so much!!


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
    Randall?s Dayle, thank you for stopping by to read and review my work. I am very honored.
    jlsavell
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Oh my Jimi,
This is so achingly relatable and deeply empathized, though loss of
mine were at older age level; and yours all the more agonizing in
grief over 'newborn bones' child loss. The passage of time does indeed
imbed all the deeper the recent memories contrasted to the later or
last ones; yet mother's heart bears through them all, with no less
love and gratitude for their precious life, however brief or short.
Your abiding love in and beyond the inevitabl sorrow is no less
all the more precious epitaph and eurlogy, and legacy of irreplaceable
devotion and abidingly tender and gently caressing memory.
Thanks for sharing again. A keepsake for sure for your loved one!
Love, blessings always, Ronni





 Comment Written 19-Apr-2019



reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
    Ronni,
    Dearest friend and beautiful lady,
    I know this moves you. I think of you each time I write something so very personal. Our lives greatly parallel, only on a different plane of time. Your reviews astound and humble me greatly. I am always moved by your articulate words and discerning heart. My heart, also, goes out to you.
    Ronni, once again a huge thank you..
    I will be in your port soon..

    jimi
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