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Drama in the garden


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Wow, Ms. Trimple, you packed a lot of imagery in 17 syllables. I saw those dainty pink flowers and honeybee.

This poem makes you wonder which can first, the artwork or the poem.

I hope this poem did well or would do well in the contest.


 Comment Written 24-May-2019


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Honeybee's bum is about the most adorable image I can think of in a garden! You've done a beautiful job with this little 5-7-5 entry! Best of luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 02-May-2019



reply by the author on 02-May-2019
    Thank you, Beri :)
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Then there was the alternative last line for those of a delicate disposition. 'Hears bumble bee's hum.' My apple tree is in bloom and so is the crab apple a hundred yards away. Now all we need is a bit of warmth so the bees can get pollinating.


 Comment Written 01-May-2019


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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the pink flowers in Spring that tremakes when the honey Bee's bum comes to collect pollen for honey,


 Comment Written 01-May-2019



reply by the author on 01-May-2019
    Hello there, Sandra

    The point of this shorty, suggests that because it's raining, the honeybee sticks his head into the flower and all we see is his bum :)

    Thank you for your review

    kind regards

    trimple

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Oh I do like this blend of lyricism with irreverance... keeping it real. That trembling pink flower getting ravished by a fat-bummed bee. She's exposed to the rain but he is up to his stripes in her. What a delightful poem Tracey. Well done on its simplicity carrying complexity.


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2019


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This is an amusing 5-7-5 and image. It looks as if the bee is drunk on nectar. Too much of a good thing. Best of luck in the contest. It looks like a winner to me. Marilyn


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2019


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Hi Twilight, LOL...he looks like he is digging for gold....
we are looking at mother nature at her best...you can't say he didn't give his all...LOL...very nicely written sweet lady...and I sooooo love this picture...love your poem...love you....Twosocks....xxoo


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2019


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Very creative five/seven/five, at first I scratched my head. But then a minute later, it made me laugh. The presentation is perfect, and maybe I am off base here but I think a little "naught" is going on here. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2019


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Well this is just the cutest picture and short poem I've ever seen about a honeybee's butt.

Great job Tracey and best wishes to you with the Contest Committee.

Gloria


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2019


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Lol! What a hilarious picture! I wonder is the bee so fatigued, he fell asleep in the flower? Loved your wonderful imagination to turn this picture into a fun poem complete with the personification of the flower.


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