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Lost on Planet Z


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This is a sci-fi book especially for girls.

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This story line is rich with expandable details and lore that could be, or maybe has already, presented as a larger, ongoing tale for kids. This latest introduction of the 'forgiveness fruit' is another innovative invention that pulls the imagination in, as they figure out how to employ it. Neat stuff.


 Comment Written 13-May-2019



reply by the author on 13-May-2019
    Thanks for reading and reviewing, Bill!
    Bless you!
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So, ol' wise, all-knowing, Hahmee ain't sharin' that forgiveness fruit with 'one of dem'... eh? Sounds like the same story that has repeated itself in human history forever... sigh. The ability to 'look beyond and not back' is certainly an advanced concept many of us have not mastered...LOL! :) :) Thanx for sharing! ;) ;) Yvette

heard his messages --> heard her messages



 Comment Written 12-May-2019



reply by the author on 13-May-2019
    Forgiving sometimes hurts, I guess. Thanks for the thoughtful review, Yvette!
    Blessings!
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This is so well written and I love the prickly fruit that two people who are experiencing differences need to pick up together to aid in forgiveness. That's a wonderful symbolism and the need for cooperation. The togetherness of the beings is enchanting.

Great job with a fine book.

Gloria


 Comment Written 10-May-2019



reply by the author on 10-May-2019
    Thank you so much, Gloria for reviewing this story! Appreciate your thoughtful comments! Hugs!
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Cheers, Helen:|
>Much better characterization and visual identification a spot on, But the names keep getting to me, as I can't remember them or visualize them yet.
> Grumpy, fat tummy, purple head?
>Bahbee and his friends, All dressed alike, had different type of clothing a different type of colors, or their feet wall webbed? You see what I'm getting at?having a hard time identifying The names of the figure's personality Or that character persons attributes.
> Otherwise the story is great.
> Enough For now
take care
Alx


 Comment Written 10-May-2019



reply by the author on 10-May-2019
    Lol. Sorry about the names. I really want you to remember you're in a foreign place. They don't have webbed feet. I haven't talked about their feet much other than being crescent-shaped. It's mostly keratin. I appreciate your advice, Alx. And I'll have to spend more time describing the differences when I get to a more final draft form. Right now, I'm just working on the storyline. Appreciate your thoughtful comments. Hope you have a wonderful weekend!

reply by krys123 on 11-May-2019
    Something to give some type of identification. I'm just saying that for me, It may be different with others, you know? Do you read Giraffmang? Good writer!
    > He stopped me to develop characters to their surroundings. For instance one had a hard time balancing in an area that was unsteady due to his bad legs.
    > Lady had a hard time drinking because of the cleft lip. Certain things that bring out identification no matter how you do it.
    > I don't know, just throwing things out there for you. Not telling you what to do that's your business.
    Take care
    \Alx
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Hi Helen, Looks as if someone will just have to deal with the prickliness of the Forgiveness Fruit after all. I wonder if that storm has something to do with the fact that there is discord down below? :)


 Comment Written 10-May-2019



reply by the author on 10-May-2019
    Thanks for reading this and for the thoughtful comments. No, storms do happen on that planet - it happened once before but it could be a good thing in this case. Have a lovely Mother's Day weekend!

reply by susand3022 on 10-May-2019
    Happy Mother's Day to you too! :)
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A very well-written chapter each place has their own rules and customs. We as visitors and strangers can sometimes just look in awe of the things others find important to do, while we would may think their is no purpose.


 Comment Written 10-May-2019



reply by the author on 10-May-2019
    Thanks so much for the thoughtful review, Sandra!
    Have a lovely Mother's Day weekend!
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I gather that the friuit entitled the forgiveness fruit, dropped by grumps, has a mystic quality and if partaken by both the Bohdee and the Ghozztee, they need to reconcile and the youngest Bohdee seems be, perhaps the key to the dilemma. A little child shall lead them. Well done, good scribing, you're wise Helen, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 10-May-2019



reply by the author on 10-May-2019
    Appreciate your wisdom in reading, Roy! Thank you for the supportive review! Blessings to you and Elaine!

reply by royowen on 10-May-2019
    My pleasure
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This is a great return to the story. Very exciting. I laughed when Ash said she felt things hitting the ground. I'm wondering if this thunder and lightning is a higher power than Hahmee. Sweet how everyone started crying together. I hope nothing happens to change their little world.


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reply by the author on 10-May-2019
    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, Yvonne. I'm glad you like the child-like Bohdee people. Hugs!
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This post was well written and exciting. I wonder what the problem is and why HaMe is so upset. I anxiously look forward to the next post and hope the problem is resolved. Thanks for sharing this with us.


 Comment Written 10-May-2019



reply by the author on 10-May-2019
    I think the resentment that caused the division of the people is so old, it won't be easy to overcome that. Sometimes, it'll take something outside ourselves to put things into perspective. Thanks for the review, Sasha! Hugs!

reply by Sasha on 10-May-2019
    You are welcome.
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Very interesting work. Is this another planet? I like the structure as well as the pace and phrasing. Thank you for sharing this! Please keep up the great writing!


 Comment Written 10-May-2019



reply by the author on 10-May-2019
    Thank you for stopping by to read and review this little sci-fi for youth.
    Blessings!
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