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Ode to the Reaper


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Grief has taken its toll on this farmer in your well written Irregular ode, Red, as he takes out the anger he's left with on the land, his crop. I don't really get the Hiroshima reference in your notes, but I'm presuming that's why you've used the pic. I look on that from a different side of the fence, as my Dad was one of thousand POW's saved from their living hell. Enjoyed your Ode,
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valda


 Comment Written 22-May-2019



reply by the author on 22-May-2019
    I think the use of the A-bomb was necessary, both the end the war and to scare the world. The poem is a retelling of a Ray Bradbury story, he mentioned Hiroshima as a swing of the maddened reaper's blade...thanks very much for reading and reviewing my try at an irregular ode...
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So the man has lost touch with reality after the death of his wife and child. He goes about his life in a way that doesn't make sense--much like the A-bomb that killed so many innocent people although at the time many thought it was necessary. Your picture choice is eerie to think that humans can, and do, sometimes destroy without thinking only to find out they were wrong. I counted 13 lines--does filed have a rhyme? Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan


 Comment Written 22-May-2019



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    How did I manage that? "He sought to spare but fates were sealed." The line followed the word pain. Some how it got lost, and I didn't catch it. Thanks for mentioning it!(I use notepad on my desktop and move the posts on a USB flash drive...) thanks for reading and reviewing.
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People justify the loss and treat it like mowing a field, just something that has to be done. It is our duty, we are the ones in the right, the just. We look but don't drive to see the value before us. Irreplaceable life.

When we don't see others as our part of our human family, it is a type of madness.

Love the message! Love the format.


 Comment Written 21-May-2019



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    I hope my attempt at writing an irregular ode was somewhere near the truth, I don't remember trying an ode of any kind before...thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
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An excellent poem, Red. I have often thought of this, especially with gardening. The minute plants and animals are wiped out with one fell swoop if they fall within the eye's focused space. Marilyn


 Comment Written 21-May-2019



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    I have stopped mowing the fringes of my yard, I want the locusts to survive...a noble excuse, eh? Thanks very much for reading my try at an irregular ode...
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Red,

This is a lovely and sad retelling of the story. It's beautiful and so tragic. I can understand the brother's angry/sad/confused actions, though. Thanks, my friend!


 Comment Written 21-May-2019



reply by the author on 21-May-2019
    I was a great fan of Bradbury, Sturgeon, Leinster and all the old sci-fi masters. I meant to travel in the same class is the reason I took up writing 'way too late...thanks for reading and reviewing.
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A very well-written irregular ode poem to the reaper. A man who got crazy when his wife and children die, and he start reaping the wheat that is ripe or green because he seems not to care any longer.


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    That story stuck in my mind, the man stricken with personal grief who loses all sight of the bigger picture....thanks very much for reading and reviewing my attempt at an irregular ode."
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This is an eerie and chilling write and we are marred by such events so much so that we become unsteady and behave strangely, a spine tingling tale, best wishes, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 21-May-2019



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    The story by Ray Bradbury impressed me very much in my youth and I finally gave in to the urge to put it in verse. I was a sci-fi nut back in the sputnik days...thanks for reading and reviewing.
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Nice poem. I enjoyed it. It flows well and has good rhythm. I like the way you connected to the Bradbury story, it works well. Thanks for sharing and have a great day


 Comment Written 20-May-2019



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    I was not sure just how irregular an irregular ode needed to be, so
    I went with this, hoping it's close...thanks very much for reading and
    reviewing. Love that vintage sci fi.
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What a chilling poem... the mushroom cloud of man's inhumanity to man echoing the sentiment of the grim reaper who "mows the ripe grain and the green". You have written an excellent, thought-provoking and well rhymed poem.


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reply by the author on 20-May-2019
    I have to thank Ray Bradbury for the scary thought...the poem is my try for an irregular ode...I fear it may not be irregular enough. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
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