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Conflagration


Fiery cause-and-effect

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Rmocruz
 
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I found this to be a very interesting, well written fiction, held my attention
right up to the cleverly twisted ending.
Looks like a promising contest entry.
Best wishes!.


 Comment Written 30-May-2019



reply by the author on 30-May-2019
    Thanks, Rmocruz. I appreciate your feedback and encouragement very much. xo

reply by Rmocruz on 30-May-2019
    You're welcome Rachelle!
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It is a shame that there is no one to whisper in Danielle's ear 'Run' this guy is not just an arsonist he a psychopath. More is in danger than just her house. Gret tale well written.
Rikki


 Comment Written 29-May-2019



reply by the author on 29-May-2019
    Thanks, Rikki. I appreciate this spot-on review!! Thanks for the encouragement very much.

reply by Rikki66 on 29-May-2019
    Danka Schoen
    Rikki
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Gail Denham
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Well done - mysterious and weird. And the ending unexpected. Always good in a short story. Strange people roam our streets - guess we'd best be careful who we trust.
Good job.


 Comment Written 29-May-2019



reply by the author on 29-May-2019
    Ain't THAT the truth!!! Perhaps today more than ever! Thanks for your encouraging words here.
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Oh dear, how wrong we can get it sometimes lol! I wonder how he's going to explain the two burning houses either side of Danielle?? I not only enjoyed the content of this story, but it's wonderful flow and how well written it was. He might need to dye his hair to a more "muted" shade do you think? Might tone his rather impetuous temper down a wee bit lol!

This was very clever, and I hope it does well in the contest. Good luck!


 Comment Written 28-May-2019



reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Yes, he needs all KINDS of make-over work, definitely! But the hair is probably the best place to start. (well, plus he needs an alibi since Danielle is NOT going to be able to help him after he kept her waiting an hour...)

    Thanks for the fun review.

reply by Gypsymooncat on 28-May-2019
    Please tell me he didn't return home with a gerry can full of petrol...

reply by Gypsymooncat on 28-May-2019
    I meant to say "an EMPTY gerry can" lol!

reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Haha. I imagined that's what you meant.
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He set a house on fire for nothing, hmm. It's very well-written, interesting. I love how you got into his head, showed us his thoughts, feelings, helped us understand your character. Nicely done, good luck with your contest.


 Comment Written 28-May-2019



reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    It make me a little squeamish to be inside that creepy, warped mind, though! But thank you for your terrific review!!
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Dear Mystery Writer,

hahaha! So. This smartie pants doesn't know everything he think he does after all. AND Danielle has no stinking idea of the kind of maniac she's crawling into bed with - fabulous!

Nice story. So far, yours is winning my vote. Good luck!


 Comment Written 28-May-2019



reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Nope. Tragedy all the way around. Thanks for your encouragement, Robyn.
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Great, nice ending twist I didn't entirely see coming. Well written. Your arsonist (arson doesn't need a capital letter, by the way) is a sinister type, exemplified by his lack of name. Well done, should do well in the contest.


 Comment Written 28-May-2019



reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Thanks for that edit, Sarkems. I'll get right on changing it. I always appreciate it when reviewers have my back like that. I also appreciate the well-wishes for the contest.
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LOL!!! Now what will he do? Pretend he had nothing to do with it, or will she guess? That was a really good fire story, I just feel sorry for all the innocents' houses he torched. Well done, a great contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx


 Comment Written 28-May-2019



reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    It might be hard for him to pretend wearing that ski mask and black clothing (and, no doubt, smelling of lighter fluid...). But maybe Danielle's not good at noticing such things!

    Thanks for the great review, Sandra. I appreciate it.
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Hi :)
This is a really well written short story.
Gripping and entertaining. I like how you included a few different references to the fiery theme...the red hair, temper, arson, the cinnamon shot, heartburn and the 'slow burn!' - really cleverly done :)
Someone clearly doesn't take the thought of rejection too well! What a psycho...I fear for Danielle, getting involved with this loony!
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)


 Comment Written 28-May-2019



reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Thank you, Debra, for noticing the fire references I threw in there, like little flint strikes, along the way. I appreciate that very much.

    You're right about poor Danielle. She's got to improve in the Picking Men department!!

    Thanks for the delightful review (see what I did there de LIGHT ful...) and the well-wishes with the contest. Very much appreciated.
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Jeffrey L. Michaux
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Well, I guess that he didn't know her as well as he thought. Perhaps she was giving him mixed signals. That was really quite a feet to accomplish just for your advances being turned down, or were they? What about the people he didn't know? What would happen to him if he gets to complete the conquest? He perhaps did all of that work for nothing. I like the what ifs that this thought provoking work presents to the readers. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!


 Comment Written 27-May-2019



reply by the author on 27-May-2019
    Thank you very much, Jeffrey. This is a spot-on review, and I love it.
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