Surprise Me This is a flash fiction contest. Write a story that has a surprise ending. Since it is flash, the word count must be between 200 and 600 words. The ending can be funny, sad, shocking, etc. But the reader has to be surprised.
HELLO JAYBIRS1: I can relate to what you are saying here because I find myself on the same boat with you. Someone left me like that too. I've been dealing with it for years. But I refuse to let it make me who I am today. I can't control what happened in the past. But I can control what happens in the present and the future. I can control my emotions concerning the matter. That's what I'm living for today. God Bless you, Jaybird1.
I could see this as a country song so I'd say you did emulate Hank Williams' style and it becomes a positive tribute to him. As I read it, I thought, this only shows one side of the story. Would be interesting to read why she left.
Hi Jaybird, this is a wonderfully written poem. It's so very sad, though. His not only lost his love but his son as well. It is as if there's a glimmer of hope at the very end, but I don't think it will happen somehow. I liked your poem a lot. Very expressive. All the best. Ulla:))
Can't go to wrong trying to copy Hank Williams. I can empathize with this narrator, since my wife left me, too. After 18 years together. I didn't want to get divorced. Once a man's family is broken up, he never feels the same. He feels empty and as though he failed somehow.