HELLO JAYBIRS1: I can relate to what you are saying here because I find myself on the same boat with you. Someone left me like that too. I've been dealing with it for years. But I refuse to let it make me who I am today. I can't control what happened in the past. But I can control what happens in the present and the future. I can control my emotions concerning the matter. That's what I'm living for today. God Bless you, Jaybird1.
I could see this as a country song so I'd say you did emulate Hank Williams' style and it becomes a positive tribute to him. As I read it, I thought, this only shows one side of the story. Would be interesting to read why she left.
Hi Jaybird, this is a wonderfully written poem. It's so very sad, though. His not only lost his love but his son as well. It is as if there's a glimmer of hope at the very end, but I don't think it will happen somehow. I liked your poem a lot. Very expressive. All the best. Ulla:))
Can't go to wrong trying to copy Hank Williams. I can empathize with this narrator, since my wife left me, too. After 18 years together. I didn't want to get divorced. Once a man's family is broken up, he never feels the same. He feels empty and as though he failed somehow.