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Minute Poem

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Good one Steve, your Minute poem left me with a smile. I really enjoyed this one, in particular the tension you set up, the second verse is a beauty. Loved it.
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 06-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Valda. Who hasn't been scared by strange noises in the night?!

    Steve
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Now there's a god to unite the nations. There would be few who are unfamiliar with him. I like the way the trailing echo of the short lines adds to the haunting atmosphere. A good use of the form.


 Comment Written 05-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Tony.

    I was quite pleased with how this one fell into place.

    Steve
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The artwork said to me, "The House Of Usher." I cannot find fault in the Minute poem, as far as rhyme, meter, image. An excellent post, in my unschooled opinion.


 Comment Written 04-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Red. Actually, I'm not that happy with the artwork, but it was the best I could find.

    Steve
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This is high on my creepy chart, Steve. Gives me chills and I can predict a few nightmares in my future just from reading this.

Best wishes in the contest.

Joy xx


 Comment Written 04-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Joy.

    Creepy was my intention. Think happy thoughts and avoid those nightmares at all costs!

    Steve
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Ah, giving Dean a run for his money in the creepy poem category. Perfection in form and positively frightening. Good luck in the race to the podium. - Wendy


 Comment Written 04-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Wendy.

    Can't let Dean have all the creepy section to himself!

    Appreciate the six stars.

    Steve
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Cleverly done in a minute poem for the contest.

In darkest night, I am the sweep
of wings, the creep
of foot on stair
when no one's there.

This part is very well done and my favorite.
Count and form are spot on


 Comment Written 04-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Barb.

    I like the feel of that part too and perhaps it resonates - who hasn't heard mysterious night-time noises?

    Steve
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Nicely creepy roll of the dice Steve.
You are the man of the hour of the Minute.
A little flatery goes a long way .
Even if I mean it.
I'm still reeling rolling with the winkle wonkle. :-))Z.


 Comment Written 04-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
    Yep, this is no winkel-wagon - trying to balance the books by heading in the other direction.

    Steve
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Eloquent and intense. DEAN would LOVE this! Masterrfully crafted meter and rhyme in a true to form minute poem. The fluidity of enjambment is remarkable read aloud, especially this stanza:

In darkest night, I am the sweep

of wings, the creep

of foot on stair

when no one's there.

The presentation is fantastic. Atmospheric combo!

Bravo and good luck.

Warmly, rd


 Comment Written 04-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Rama. I like that stanza too, although I was a little worried that others may read it without the pause and flow necessary to get the full meaning.

    First stanza came to me ten minutes after I got into bed, so I got up and wrote it down. Second stanza came in the middle of the night and I repeated it to myself often enough that I still remembered it in the morning. Third stanza was also in my head overnight, but I couldn't recall it in the morning and had to piece it back together in dribs and drabs during the day.

    What a hard life we poets have!

    Steve

reply by rama devi on 04-Jun-2019
    Ah yes! My muse is a night owl too...

    Warmly,
    rd
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I love the disturbing and eerie theme here. It made me look over my shoulder as I read this in my dark living room :)

You've established that right emotional reaction here with the toll of a human soul. That's the ultimate price anyone can pay. Beautiful!


 Comment Written 03-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
    Thank you for the very kind words. It seems my work frequently drifts towards the dark side, even though I am not a believer in anything magical and mystical!

    Steve
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This is a clever, unique and well worded minute, the sentiments here resonate and your near rhyme is good too: toll/soul, but most of all I could identify with your words, good luck with the contest, you had my attention here, love Dolly x


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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
    Dolly, thanks for the kind words. To my kiwi ear, toll/soul is pretty close to a full rhyme, but I know that is not so for everyone.

    Steve
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