Hi Bill, I really like that bit at the end about the Lion, walking around, seeking who to devour! That's great imagery... Well, I guess we'll have to come back to see what's happened to Mr. Connor... :)
Intriguing chapter; and the events probably all too real. So much we don't know about how our government works, not only on the military side, but all branches regardless. You've shown here that it takes all kinds of "talent" to be in these type of jobs and what is required. I can't help but wonder who monitors them to assure the goal is being maintained with integrity? Loren
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
As we read in history books of the CIA, FBI, and NSA, many of these organizations become dynasties run through shadow controllers using funds from all sources imaginable.
I really liked this chapter. It was short though intense. I feel as though the characters were very well developed. This said, I did not understand what exactly was going on. Aside from that, I envy your ability to write dialogue so nicely! Could you give me some tips?
Have a great day!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
This is the fifth chapter in this story, which is a sequel to another story, so it would be difficult to know. Thanks for reading though.
The basic rule for dialogue is not to confuse the reader. I should know who is speaking. When you change speakers, begin anew paragraph.
Don?t overuse speaker tags if it isn?t necessary. If the speaker would know who is speaking, there?s no need in identifying them.
reply by D.G Leo on 05-Jun-2019
Thank you for all the information. It helps a lot!
Excellent advice. 1st Peter 5:8. I have used that quote in some of my writings before. Sadly, some are not capable of the discipline required to be diligent enough to accomplish this. Bill, I have said this before, and I will say it yet again, this is some very good, consistent writing. You have managed to stay on point with your story and this adds to the enjoyment of the story immensely. Very good.
Interesting chapter describing a very unexpected incident for Ryan. I like how are tied in that scripture, which I guess is a warning about Samantha and what she is capable of. Thanks for sharing this!