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Do Not Give Up On Me


Problematic behaviors that I work on for the man I love

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Darlene Franklin
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How I love your transparency. I am encouraged by your ability to change. Hold on that, on those days w hen things are miserable. It sounds like your spouse understands, and that's a blessing.


 Comment Written 14-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    I am a life long learner and consider constructive criticism as a sign of friendship. To be authentic means to grow.
    This experience with my brother will change me in ways I cannot know. I will be there to help him face a life saving surgery. It will be a privilege to stand with him.
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I have been in this state myself, where it is all I can do to get out of bed. But you are right, we carry on with the day if only to be there for our spouse. Well written.


 Comment Written 14-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    I am ready to face the pain of whatever comes and I am writing again. Always a good sign.
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I love your tongue-in-cheek humor in this write. Your positive ... Can Do... attitude is fun to read and we cheer for you, as you conquer each challenge. Well done and well written.

Melissa


 Comment Written 14-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    My brother may be the most stubborn person I know and it just might save his life. I will be there by next week to be with him before his big surgery. I also intend to take a walk among the tall Vermont trees no matter what happens.
    My whole entire family finds laughter to be a great healer.
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Yes, we do try to go above and beyond that which we feel we may not be capable of at times for our significant others, don't we? Sometimes it's harder for them to see our struggles, but we still try for them... :) :) A wonderful offering that shows the beauty of your heart and the battles it must endure ... .thank you for sharing and may you find sunshine on your efforts today! ;) ;)


 Comment Written 12-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    It means a lot to me to show my love for husband in this way. He has always given so much for me.
    It was also a good way to see my behaviors and realize how irritating they are but amusing too.
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I love this humorous look at working on behaviors out of love and respect for your spouse. Very well written and presented in a creative and humorous way. I appreciate it and so will your spouse.
Bill


 Comment Written 12-Jun-2019


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    Thank you for reading.
    He was amused. I am definitely working towards habits that will improve and remain permanently. We really do have a choice in these matters. The battle is being aware of it and understanding the impact of your actions to others.
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Staying positive is tough when you are feeling down, but not giving way to those feelings will also help yourself, so that you both benefit from your positive attitude. Remember what you face daily is the same thing everyone faces, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 12-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    I do think what I live with are the same issues as others face only at a deeper level and often occur with feelings of self loathing. However, I have the choice to get up everyday with a fresh new start. Today- I have this.
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You are managing to make lemonade out of lemons, right? The poem is well crafted and shows the ingenuity that you are employing here. Yes we won't give up on you, because as you say, you've got it. Well done. Thanks for sharing your efforts


 Comment Written 11-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    I am thankful for all I have learned and to all those who have been my support. I am also at the point, where I can poke fun at myself. It is also me saying-yes I know this is what I am like and I am trying my best.
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Very good - I liked this poem - and glad you won't walk into glass doors - something we've all done. I like the repetition of "I got this" - it's like pulling yourself up by the boot straps I think. Reassuring yourself perhaps. I enjoyed this - we've all been there (or perhaps we're not out of bed yet.)


 Comment Written 10-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    It has been a journey-a long journey. Even though I can bring chaos into any situation; I can now laugh.

    People w mental illness have a choice. It is not easy, but gets easier as you go. It can be managed.

reply by Gail Denham on 10-Jun-2019
    Great that you can laugh. I always feel that's half the battle.
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Great work. I like your approach to problems. Leaving sad feelings at home with the dog--wonderfully expressed. Trying not to walk into glass doors or mirrors is a worthy endeavor, too! This is delightful because you can poke a bit of fun at yourself and your problems. That's a good sign. Great choice of the sign for your artwork. My only suggestion would be not to make the lines so long, so that this will look more like a poem. judi


 Comment Written 10-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    I often think my reviews are better than what is being reviewed.
    I am totally poking fun at myself. It can be extremely frustrating to have intelligence and act like someone, who is mentally delayed in their development.

    Yes, I think I have many worthy endeavors everyday.
    I have a choice- I can be the victim or I can choose my life.

    I agree with you about the staging. I was trying the advanced editor and could not change it. Gave up and posted anyways

reply by judiverse on 10-Jun-2019
    You're welcome. I think it's a good thing you can make fun of yourself. We sometimes tend to dwell on our shortcomings and think the worst is going to happen. Thankfully that's not always the case. judi
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And here I was thinking you were doing this for your brother! After the last poem I read, last night as I'm trying to catch up from the last few busy days, I was sure you were trying to keep it together for your brother so he wouldn't worry about you. I guess that for you, holding it together is one of those daily things. I wish you well Flyaway... keeping you, and your family in my thoughts. :)


 Comment Written 10-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
    Thank you for reading. I had switched subjects, when I got to post "Do not give up on me". I wrote this for my husband wanting him to know I am almost there. He is very patient and I work really hard.
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