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Free verse

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dragonpoet
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This could be about the knots tied in an abusive relationship. Feelings that the abused has the abuse may be deserved. He/she needs to cut the not and find someone that can smooth the pain from the injuries caused by the abuser and show what real love is. You use spacing and line breaks well to strengthen emotion.
Congrats for placing second in the contest.
Keep writing.
~Joan


 Comment Written 22-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Joan.

    Steve

reply by dragonpoet on 24-Jun-2019
    You're welcome, Steve.
    ~Joan
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This was such a poetic joy to read... you amaze me some times with your eloquence... your presentation is also spectacular... looking forward as always... yours, Diana


 Comment Written 20-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
    Diana, many thanks for the great review and six star rating!

    Steve
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I'm this is religion-based, but I could be wrong. Little lengthy, but nice structure and imagery. Also liked some of the syntax. Thanks for sharing your puppet poem.


 Comment Written 18-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
    Thanks for the kind words. The last stanza certainly has a spiritual flavour and many FanStorians are that way inclined.

    Steve
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This is well done. I like the symbolism of the puppeteer, pulling strings to make the puppet or marionette dance. Too often the wrong hands hold the strings, but then a savior comes and cuts them all to set us free. I hope you do well in the contest.


 Comment Written 18-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Roxanna.

    We are all 'controlled' to some extent in our lives. Here I am thinking of childhood, working life, old age and death, with different 'puppeteers' manipulating us at each stage.

    Steve
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This is an interesting and well written poem that I enjoyed reading. Your free verse incorporates great word choices. Best of luck in the contest with this fine piece. Marilyn


 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
    Marilyn, thank you very much for the kind words.

    Steve
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I found your free verse poetry most captivating. Once I started reading, I couldn't stop. You told a whole story in this poetic format that I would call "classical free verse". Well done.


 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
    Thanks, Victor.

    Not sure if it's classical or not - it just seemed a style appropriate for what I wanted to say.

    Steve

reply by victor 66 on 19-Jun-2019
    Steve, not being very sophisticated, I thought your poem not only classical but also elegant.
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This is professional level.

Whether intended or not, I see a metaphor here that I like a lot.

Very nice work. You get the highest rating.

Thank you for sharing it.


 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
    Thank you very much for the very kind words and the six stars! Since you don't tell me what metaphor you're thinking of, I can't tell you whether it was intended. Oh, heck! let's just say it was!

    Steve

reply by Steve Harsin on 19-Jun-2019
    For me, anyway, there seemed a very clear sexual metaphor. On the other hand, I may have a dirty mind. HA!

reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
    OK Definitely unintended then! :O)
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Oh wow! Poor marionette, indeed! I was not expecting Gepetto, but of course, without strings, the puppet becomes real (human). So... this makes me think of the entire concept/argument of free will. And, that thought makes the Gordian Knot's cut quite a significant statement, I think. A cut of the sword seems like destruction, but here it's the key to freedom. I'm in awe of this poem.


 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
    What a lovely review - thank you very much, both for the very kind words and the six stars.

    Steve
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What a well written and imaginative poem you've created. I enjoyed every minute i was reading it...actually felt sorry for the puppets! A great entry for the free verse contest. Best of luck.


 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
    Thank you very much.

    Steve

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I know this isn't but it could be political satire, seeing the way our world is being played.
Your imagery is always so deep. For a moment I was the puppet. Manipulated with little to say about it. Freedom felt wonderful.

Best of luck in the contest.



 Comment Written 17-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
    Thanks, bd.

    You're right, there is no political puppeteer in this poem. Perhaps that theme deserves a poem of it's own, and then we would have to ask ourselves the question of who is pulling whose strings.

    Here's an interesting thought your words have sparked - what if you had layered puppets - a puppeteer manipulating a puppet who was himself controlling a lesser puppet?

    Yes, indeed, if you feel you have been strung along all your life, freedom is a glorious feeling.

    Steve

reply by barkingdog on 19-Jun-2019
    Layered puppetry runs the world.
    Go for it Steve. Great concept.
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