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Coming Together at the Seams


Bonds of friendship form through a quilting project

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TheStoryMan
 
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I'm sure you value these friendships far more now than you would have as a teen. Teens are ruled by their hormones and petty insecurities whereas when we mature we don't let petty things destroy our friendships. This is a beautiful story.


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
    You totally understand. Thank you, StoryMan, for this lovely review. xo
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Arlene Esse
 
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What a lovely tale of solidarity and friendship! The title is perfect as it caught my eye to read more. I am not a quilter but I was taken in by your solid writing in telling how this emotional bond came about and likely won't be broken. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 25-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
    What a really nice review this is, Arlene. I'm so glad you wrote to let me know how you felt about this piece. Thank you very much. xo
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Heather Rain
 
 
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I really enjoyed this story. It seemed real . I have a nanna that does quilting. So I understood a lot of. What is said.


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    Did she teach you, Heather?
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Michele Harber
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Hello again, my FSBFF. This is another interesting and charming story, made more so by the fact that it's true. I liked the tale of friendship and camaraderie and female bonding, but what I enjoyed most about the way you told it was the number of sewing and quilting metaphors you threaded into the story. (Sorry, I originally said "sprinkled," but it sounded more appropriate to a cooking story.)

As always, you use a great deal of detail but, as I'd mentioned once before, sometimes you use more detail than is necessary or appropriate. Where that was particularly apparent in this story was in your description of the kitchen. The only descriptive words you used for the bathroom and living room were "full" and "huge." While "well-equipped" would have sufficed for the kitchen, you went so far as to mention the brand of dishware and the quality of the pots and coffee-maker. This wouldn't be a problem if the kitchen were pertinent to the story but, in fact, your story never once mentioned the quilters even having a meal there.

By contrast, the detailed description of the sewing room was not only very well done but very apropos, as making the quilt was the group's and, therefore, the story's raison d'etre. (I'm sorry but I know what this site does to punctuation of English words, so I'm not even going to try with French!) The point is that you don't need to paint a vivid description just because you can. (We already know how good you are at it.) When you use too much detail on something that doesn't require it, you bring too much attention to it, and take the focus from where it should be.

Other than that, though, another great story - and the title is perfect!


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    I see what you're saying, and you're absolutely right. I'll get to the editing down of that. Thanks very much. xo

reply by Michele Harber on 24-Jun-2019
    You're very welcome. On the other hand, you did make me want to visit the house. It may not work from a story-writing perspective but, from a real estate agent's perspective, it was perfect!

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    Must be my husband's influence. He just got his license six months ago.

reply by Michele Harber on 24-Jun-2019
    Good for him! Now stop listening to his house descriptions and start listening to the important points of your own stories!!! [The Great and Powerful Oz - or your FSBFF - has spoken!]

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    You have Ozicality!

reply by Michele Harber on 24-Jun-2019
    Indubitabibly.

    FYI, you really are rubbing off on me. In the review of your quilting group story, I actually caught myself spelling kitchen "kithchen."

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    Oh, gawd no!!!! That's so bad!!

reply by Michele Harber on 24-Jun-2019
    Isn't there a vaccine I can take against Transthformathionitis??

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    Ask Aletha!

reply by Michele Harber on 24-Jun-2019
    Nothing perthonical, but you have a thpeetch impediment.
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24chas
 
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What a special story, Rachelle. Your tone and style make this such a smooth and pleasant read. I felt like I was right there in the midst of it all. Great job.


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    Oh geez; that I wouldn't wish on ANY man! But thank you for your kind and gracious words. I appreciate the review very much. xo
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Phyllis Stewart
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Wonderful idea and it sounds like you all did a terrific job on the quilt. My mom's women's club made one and raffled it off too. I forget what the design was, but it looked great. She never could teach me to quilt. I don't have the patience to stitch by hand. I could sew the pieces together by machine, but then I'd lose interest when the hand-sewing began.


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    Oh, I'm with you on that. I like embroidery, but not hand-stitching any garment or binding. Ugh. I always delegate THAT job. Do you have any of the quilts your mom and her club made? Did she ever make any just on her own? xo

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 24-Jun-2019
    No, she never made one for our house. It wouldn't have suited the decor.

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    Bummer!
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Hi Rachelle, you are easily one of the easiest reads on the site! I have found several favorites of course... you are definitely one of them! You never fail to entertain, even when it's a more serious piece than one of your Saturday morning piano lessons... (which I adore by the way!) We don't get half enough 6's for all the things that I had in my mailbox after 2 days!


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
    Thank you, Susan. I so appreciate this review. xo
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shaffer40
 
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This is a beautifully written, warm story that I greatly enjoyed. There are some people that you can see anytime and be right at home with as though you never parted. I'm impressed that the women in your story continued to meet and enjoy each other's company.


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
    It's been such a wonderful extended perk of the Reunion. Thanks for this vey nice review, Shaffer 40. xo

reply by shaffer40 on 24-Jun-2019
    I forgot to mention that your title is priceless.

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
    Thank you!! No one else has mentioned that. Thanks very much. xo
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Artasylum
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Hey again Rachelle... Social Media has reunited some many people and in your case the reunion was the tie that binds wonderful people back together and it feels like you have come full circle in life... yours, di


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
    Yes, I'd say that is a perfect description. Thanks for the good review, Di. xo
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judiverse
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I have never tried quilting, but quilts are beautiful, and they all carry such a history. I think of the hand made quilts, but the ones made on a machine are lovely, too. What a worthwhile project for you, and it sounds like you had a lot of fun making the quilt. That's why they called them "quilting parties," I suppose. The occasion brought you and your classmates together. Excellent memories of the detail of your classmates' quilting bee. Quilts can be used for good causes. There's a middle school in the town where I live that makes lap quilts for wounded soldiers. judi


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
    Oh, wow. That's beautiful. What a fantastic cause, and how special for those middle-schoolers to be doing something positive for wounded soldiers. I bet it makes them more aware their entire lives of how to be generous.

    Thanks for this nice review, Judi. xo

reply by judiverse on 23-Jun-2019
    I always try to go if there's a quilt exhibit near where I live. I love them, and they are all so different. judi
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