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A View of Venus


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Boogienights
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A very interesting poem full of great imagery and imagination. Your descriptive words painted an awesome picture in the mind,of a whole different world. Best of luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
    Thanks. Glad you enjoyed my little poem.

reply by Boogienights on 11-Jul-2019
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it flows beautifully as I read through it and the punctuation (or purposeful lack of) keeps me at the rhythm that I know the author intended for me. I also pay particular attention to the presentation of it. Since there are usually fewer letters and words than a story or article, I place great importance on the spacing, placement and actual choice of letters and words.


 Comment Written 10-Jul-2019



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    Thanks for the six! Yes, it's a little more important to watch the word count with poetry than with articles or prose.
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Wonderful, when the mind wanders it certainly can wonder, and this poem certainly takes the imagination on a beautiful journey to maybe distant worlds, love the artwork, very well written****kahpot


 Comment Written 10-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
    Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed my little poem.
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"A View of Venus", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poets work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
    Thanks. I re-posted this one because it was a blind contest entry last time. Now that the contest is over I can send it out with fan notifications.

reply by duchessofdrumborg on 10-Jul-2019
    You're more than welcome, and that sounds fair enough.
    Take care and God bless,
    the Duchess !(-_-)!

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This is an imaginative and interesting poem about life on Venus. Image is dynamic and works well with your piece. I like the idea of while we are watching them, they are also watching us--wondering and dreaming as we do. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
    Thanks. It didn't win the contest. That's OK. I had fun with it.
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This is fun to read. I see you have awards so I'm not sure if you want a suggestion. Some people don't. Please let me know - it is just one line. And then I must write a bit to reach 150 ch.


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
    Thanks. Suggestions and constructive criticism are always welcome.

reply by Sheridan1 on 08-Jul-2019
    Thank you. Re: your first line. My personal thought is that when we write about writing and then refocus - we weaken the poem or story, even if it is meant to be a light read. I'd think about, rather than the reader visualizing you struggling with a pen in hand, a kite, might set the scene outdoors and give you an advance reason for looking up. Hope this is useful to you and not invasive.
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I like how you begin by wondering what to write, look at the sky, and let your imagination play. This is a poem children would like, and could inspire them to create stories or poems and draw creatures. It inspires me because I mostly relay on biographical stuff and don't use my imagination that much. Your use of rhyme is very natural.


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
    Thanks. I'm told I have quite an imagination. Glad you liked my little poem.
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rjuselius
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haha. this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear Cindy! I love the rhythm and rhyme. I love the special sentiment you refer to as stellar occupations.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
    Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
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You sit and ponder over the cosmic life and existence, and weave stories of being on a world cold and wet; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
    Thanks. I'm so glad you liked my little poem.
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What a neat reflection on what might be out there!
You handle some difficult rhymes well.
I believe the word in line 18 is spelled s'mores. Note the apostrophe.
I like how you describe Earth as "cold and wet."


 Comment Written 30-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
    Thanks. I'll have to fix that line. Glad you liked my poem.
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