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Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Protective Lies"

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Oh, this is a good chapter. Hen explains away all the questions and observations of Mitya and Joe. If Hen can figure out how to delete the logs, she can rendezvous with the mother ship and no one will be the wiser about the planet. Marilyn


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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
    Thanks so much for the review, Marilyn! Appreciate you keeping up with this story. Hugs!
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Wow, okay, easy to remember why I didn't like these two knuckleheads! ;) ;) Another great chapter, Professor! :) I've included some questions/catches below.... please feel free to completely ignore if you like! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and I look forward to more! ;) ;) Yvette

"Don't even touch anything!" --> "Remember, don't touch anything!" [You already told them not to touch anything at the beginning of the paragraph..:)]

Mitya and I nearly killed each other because of 'em." --> I'm guessing you mean because they got all loopy from it?? Anyway, it's not clear here why they would have been ready to 'kill each other' over them.... :) ;)

water in a day. Nothing lasts here more than a day --> water. Nothing lasts here more than a day [the back to back 'in a days' seemed repetitive...?]

voice. " That's okay, Mitya. Tell the ... a few hours. --> voice. [start a new paragraph with the speech here..:)] "That's okay, Mitya. Tell the ... a few hours."



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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
    Sorry for the delay in responding to this review. I needed more time to go back and forth to make the changes. Yes, the loopy two were fighting each other in the last chapter. Thanks for this helpful review, Yvette! Hugs!
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A very well-written chapter, it seems the rewscue mission will succeed now that there is more help to ensure everything goes according to plan without further incidents.


 Comment Written 30-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
    Thank you so much for your supportive review, Sandra! Hugs!!
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I liked your including social commentary about "politics" and "changing facts". And Hen did "act" her role well according to Ash's instructions. Cheers- Joan


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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
    Thank you so much for following this story, also. Your kind support means a lot to me, Joan! Hugs!
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Well, Helen, this is getting a little more complicated... You may have just added an entirely new race to this Avatarish-like planet. Will most certainly be a disaster. I guess I'll just have to wait and see! :)


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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
    I wasn't planning on adding another breed. Well, except when Peeztee and MahMee get together - they could be different. Lol. Thanks for reviewing, Susan! Hugs!
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Hey Helen. I was intrigued reading the story when I saw that they found mushrooms that give off nitrous oxide. It's also very interesting that some of the plants have remarkable influence on people that touch the fruit of the plant like the Gohzztee tree with forgiveness fruit. That certainly is an interesting proposition.


 Comment Written 29-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
    Thank you for this thoughtful review, Robert. I have hinted at spiritual things in this sci-fi. Blessings on your Sunday!!

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 29-Jun-2019
    You're welcome. I thought that might be a possibility.
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So far, so good, but I don't think she can fool them for long. Maybe there's some way they can camouflage their lovely little world so no one can find it. (I'm glad Grumps tripped him. I wish something would blow those two away.)


 Comment Written 29-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
    Thank you so much, Yvonne! Yes, one more chapter and then I hope I can rewrite it well. Appreciate your support! Hugs!
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This book is just so uplifting Helen, I found myself laughing when the tree slapped her. Now that would be something, if it's done deliberately.

HA, and now another tree is tripping folks. This is really good.

I've missed so much of this delightful book, but you manage to captivate my interest as soon as I read again.

Most enjoyable. :)

Gloria




 Comment Written 29-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
    Thank you so much, Gloria. I appreciate your kind support of my book since last year! You're such an encouragement! Hugs!
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This was a clever and fun chapter. Hen better hurry if she is going to erase all the observation logs she has. I love the cleverness of this chapter. It was hard not to laugh when the others got upset with Joe and Mitya.


 Comment Written 29-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
    Glad you got a laugh or two out of it, Sashenka! Appreciate your continued interest! Hugs!!

reply by Sasha on 30-Jun-2019
    I love the name Shashank, I may just have to change my screen name to that.
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This is well written and thoroughly engaging. The thought of a tree messing with folks is quite clever. As usual, you insert a bit of herbology to teach and inform. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.


 Comment Written 29-Jun-2019



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
    Thank you for stopping by to read my sci-fi, Monica! Appreciate your supportive review! Hugs!!
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