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3-line Poem

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What a lovely you have written here, Steve. The words and meaning flow as gently as that spring rain you mention. I like the combo of rich rain and the accompanying consonance in dark and garden. I also appreciate the soft w sounds in down, warm, sweet and flowers. The thought of a heart flowering, emerging from dark spaces when properly loved is a fabulous message. The art is perfect and you have captured so much in so few words. - Wendy


 Comment Written 23-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
    Wendy, what a lovely review. Sorry this has languished for a week without a reply, but life has been a little too busy for Fanstorying lately.

    Steve
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I like the message in this three line poem Steve, with love blooming out of the darkness, as do flowers bloom with the spring rain. Nice one,
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 15-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
    Thanks, Valda. Spring is not too far away for us!

    Steve
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This is a very nicely written 3-line poem, Steve. Love can make us blossom like a spring rain brings flowers to the garden. Your piece is illustrated well, too. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn


 Comment Written 15-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
    Thanks, Marilyn.

    Spring is just around the corner for us. We have daffodils to prove it.

    Steve

reply by BeasPeas on 16-Jul-2019
    Yes, you are way down there. I was in Sydney once years ago. People were very nice. Daffodils are one of the first flowers to bloom in spring. It's hard to believe it's nearly August. Marilyn
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I enjoyed your associating love with flowering spring. The contrast between "dark" and "rich and warm" is very effective. The parallel artwork is the perfect accompaniment. Best wishes in the 3-Line Poetry Contest- Joan


 Comment Written 13-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
    Thanks, Joan. Glad you enjoyed this wee love poem.

    Steve
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Hi Steve, a well written three lines with good use of simile and a lovely romantic theme. Well displayed - lovely picture, appropriate to the wording of the poem. Good luck - Dorothy


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
    Hi, Dorothy. Haven't seen you around in a while. Hope you are well.

    Thanks for the kind words about my wee love poem.

    Steve
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A nicely written poem. One word in the last line troubles me. You wrote "...dark garden" which could as easily be "bright." Seems more upbeat. No edits or adjustments necessary.


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
    Thanks, Lance. I see your concern about 'dark' - the suggestion is that the garden (life) was previously dark but is brought to life and light by love (the warm spring rain)

    Steve
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it flows beautifully as I read through it and the punctuation (or purposeful lack of) keeps me at the rhythm that I know the author intended for me. I also pay particular attention to the presentation of it. Since there are usually fewer letters and words than a story or article, I place great importance on the spacing, placement and actual choice of letters and words.



 Comment Written 10-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
    Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed this wee love poem.

    Steve
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It's simple, clean and to the point; and it really has a nice movement to it, from the darkness of loneliness to the flowers and colors of a relationship, as the rain from one gives life to the other. Nice balance, nice nature image, it has an oriental feel to it, and a nice epiphany moment. estory


 Comment Written 10-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
    Thank you very much!

    Yes, my short form poems somehow turn into haiku-like things...

    Steve
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The spring rain 'reigns' nicely over your few lines for this contest entry - very expressive.

The illustration is a good complement to your verse. Your color choices are apropos.

Observation from my iPad view: your last line seems indented too much and that causes it to appear as two lines. You may reduce your font size, which may fix this issue for the iPad viewers.


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
    Thanks, Mark.

    Good suggestion about that last line, but I'm afraid if we had to consider every device that might be used, we might spend all day fiddling with the formatting! I imagine you must have the same problem with any reasonably long line of verse?

    Steve

reply by Mark D. R. on 10-Jul-2019
    Steve,

    I rarely have that spacing problem since my verse length is 17 syllables or less. LOL

    Mark
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Images images
Every dark hour needs a flower
If every person knew the power
Of the right word at the right time
The world would be a better place.
If I had a Hammer... :-))Z.


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
    Let's face it, no one would trust you with a hammer! You'd hammer in the morning and the evening all over this land!

    Thanks, as always!

    Steve

reply by strandregs on 10-Jul-2019
    Is that called
    Cracking poetry?
    Or painful hammer hoids
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