This is a very well written ode about the plain and simple life of every day people. You used very good descriptive words that makes me wish it was bed time so I could rest my weary body. Blessings, Teri
And so runs the week, unless we find some magic like poetry. :)
Your poem does commiserate with the everyman.
Your rhyme scheme works well. Your meter struggles in verse 2.
Fifth verse - I believe you can use quotes here so that the meaning is clear immediately. ...before you yell "Enough!"... or "enough"
The last verse speaks of our responsibility to make the best of things.
Thank you for your work.
Life is defined and explained in a middle-class point of view; and this tells man's contribution to the cause of human race in general; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
This was a fun poem to read, Jay. It is filled with truth in a poetic way. Your lines flow smoothly, the rhymes are good, the many examples given are good, and your conclusion is sound. Thanks for sharing. Jan
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