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Life's Daily Grind


A little humour, along with the grind

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Thanks, Jay for the laugh. You sure hit the nail on the head with this one.

These things are so true, but that's just life. Take care...Bill


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019


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Hi! Thank you for your poem.

This poem has an interesting shift in tone. When you say "taxes and things we should've not bought" gives a mournful, powerless tone. We're just victims of the world.

But then in the last two lines, you remind the reader that we were chosen to run the human race--and then you restore the agency that we seem to have lost touch with.

Grammar: For we, my friends, were chosen to run this human race.

Cheers!

Yuna.


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019


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This is a very well written ode about the plain and simple life of every day people. You used very good descriptive words that makes me wish it was bed time so I could rest my weary body. Blessings, Teri


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019


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An enjoyable read.
An easy read with a nice and flowing pace.
You hit the nail on the head with taxes and
stuff better left in the store.
I can not poetry but enjoy the works of
others.
Thank You!


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019


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And so runs the week, unless we find some magic like poetry. :)
Your poem does commiserate with the everyman.
Your rhyme scheme works well. Your meter struggles in verse 2.
Fifth verse - I believe you can use quotes here so that the meaning is clear immediately. ...before you yell "Enough!"... or "enough"
The last verse speaks of our responsibility to make the best of things.
Thank you for your work.


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019


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Life is defined and explained in a middle-class point of view; and this tells man's contribution to the cause of human race in general; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019


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This was a fun poem to read, Jay. It is filled with truth in a poetic way. Your lines flow smoothly, the rhymes are good, the many examples given are good, and your conclusion is sound. Thanks for sharing. Jan

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