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cowboy's weathered looks


5-7-5 (cracks and crevices)

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Comment by
dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem, my friend. I like the alliteration and the last line is exceptional. The cracks and crevices is a great metaphor~Debbie


 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019
    So pleased you liked my craggy looking cowboy's face Debbie!

    My 5-7-5 style tries to stick in alliterations for the initial letter whenever I can. I also like to play on words. In a previous 5-7-5 post, I actually only used three words, but my ingenuity (my view!) only earned me a few reviews.So some FS reviewers are not as generous as you are (-:

    Mark
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The more I read 'the cowboy's weathered looks' the more I enjoyed it! If you hadn't provided the photo of the old man, I believe I would have seen him, before long, looking just like the picture! You did a wonderful job depicting this tired, worn out, old cowboy!


 Comment Written 19-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
    Thanks Lucy!

    I don't know the backdrop of the photographer's subject, but I am guessing this cowboy is still working on his ranch! So glad you liked my simple wording in this 5-7-5 format, which is my principal writing style (including alliteration whenever I can sneak it in). My poetry wheelhouse is not capable of composing longer verse.

    Mark
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A wonderful pairing of poem and photograph. Easy to visualize the cowboy's weathered face. Here you have used alliteration and consonance with aplomb--especially the Cs. Rod


 Comment Written 19-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
    Rod,

    OK, this is another example of my alliterative style. Pleased you enjoyed this 'look' at this weathered cowboy.

    Mark

reply by RodG on 19-Oct-2019
    An excellent word portrait. Rod
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With words and visual matching, this restricted format of the 5-7-5 tells a story of a lifetime 'cowboy's weathered face '- and with an alliterative touch to booth


 Comment Written 19-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
    Thanks for your comment about this cowboy verse. The selected photo allowed me to reinforce my few words. I appreciate your stars too.

    Mark
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"Life lines of leather" - what a great line. And that is truly what some ofthose old faces show - those that have been exposed to weather all their life. Growing up where we did, we were tanned all summer - probably not good for the skin.
Great poem - great image


 Comment Written 08-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
    Thanks Gail for your review, comments, and stars for this cowboy look. Honestly, after finding the picture, the words did change to reflect those life lines.

    Mark
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You selected the perfect picture to reinforce the "cracks and crevices". I admired your use of abundant alliteration in this short but compelling poem. Cheers- Joan


 Comment Written 07-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
    Joan,

    As you know, shortness is my poem/verse style. And yes, it was a great picture found that I found on the Internet. Thanks for those stars and comments.

    Mark
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I enjoyed your 575, Mark. Good job with the syllable count. Your words flow well, the alliteration of 'c' and 'l' is great, the imagery is perfect, and your image is perfect. Where would be without cowboys of the Old West? Thanks for sharing. Jan


 Comment Written 07-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
    Jan,

    Wowee! Your extra star is so special. THANK YOU. Your frequent support and comments on my short-style poems/verses are much appreciated. So pleased that my overall presentation made a difference for you.

    Mark
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Your syllables are all excellently used to describe vividly the cowboy's face. Your poem is an effective reaction to the picture. Great use of alliteration


 Comment Written 07-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 07-Sep-2019
    Thanks Janice for your comments and stars. So pleased that the picture affected you so.

    Mark
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Hi Mark,
I'm offering six stars for your poem, partly because it tells a story. Cowboys worked hard, sunup to sundown. They drank strong coffee, ate beans and bacon, and slept on the ground most of their lives. They squinted in the sun. They rode their horses on sore butts. Aching muscles and sore joints, they never stopped until the herd was delivered. The best part of their day was a campfire before they closed their eyes. They never knew when thunder & lightning might stampede the whole bunch.
You've got some nice alliteration, too...
"cracks and crevices"
and,
"leathery life lines"
One suggestion, I might have put it,
(life lines of leather)
I like the verb you chose, "etch"
And finally, a great picture of an old cowpoke. He might be North American Indian, if I'm not mistaken. There's a lot of sorrow in those eyes.
Nicely penned!
Thanks for sharing!
cheers
Kimbob


 Comment Written 07-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 07-Sep-2019
    Kimbob,

    I already replied to the six star FS notification, but your analysis was terrific. My guess if you are into writing a long story or verse that you have fodder (with your comments) for a future western saga.

    Mark
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This 5-7-5, Cowboy's Weathered Looks, has the right set up and brings the tough and resilient cowhand into our consciousness. The outdoors builds bark on the tough old cowpoke.


 Comment Written 07-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 07-Sep-2019
    Bill,

    I do like the image you expressed with "The outdoors builds bark on the tough old cowpoke." Maybe you will run with this to create your own western poem. (-:

    Mark
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