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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "The Creation of My Angel"

A Book of Horror and Honor.

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Patty Palmer
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A hard poem to write, I bet. Losing a child is never easy'. No matter the reason. No matter the time. And it always hurts! The pain lingers for a lifetime. It's not taken likely. I know this because, I too have lost a child. It doesn't matter if you try to make friends, they're all too busy with their own grief.








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 Comment Written 23-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
    Thanks I just posted two poems together is one about the grief and loss of our children.
    Ricky

reply by Patty Palmer on 23-Jul-2019
    you're welcome
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In answer to your last line and question, I think so, this is your emotion, trials, and tribute to your lost loved one, this should always be continued, A beautiful sad read, straight from the heart, very well done****kahpot


 Comment Written 22-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
    Thank you I understand your thoughts and again your review.
    Ricky
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Completely lost for words. Jason, rest easy. With love, TETE. Very thoughtful piece and beautiful put into words. Love how you talked about everyone being there to welcome him being burn into this world. Everyone welcomed an angel. Wings hatching out? Amazing.


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
    I get lost too and I'm running about my son.
    He lived in his own what he called it to holy crackle world.
    Go figure and thanks.
    Dr. Ricky 1024
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Writer, you clearly have developed the lotions needed for all the emotions and drama that comes from parenting. You have crafted a very well developed and creative work of craft. Good successes.


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
    Thanks.
    JLR.
    Rick
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This is a very emotional poem and I think you did a good job expressing the sorrow of losing someone dear to you. Death is a terrible heartbreak that comes to every family. Good work!


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
    Thanks so much and Jason appreciates this too!
    Rick
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Diana L Crawford
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This so touching and my heart sincerely goes out to you! I cannot imagine the depth of sorrow in losing a child. Admiration of your ability to bring this to words is but an incomplete word I have to show my great respect for you. And what touches me most is that my son's name is Jason, too. xoxoxo


 Comment Written 20-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
    Name came from a 10 year old child watching a movie in the 60s called Jason and the Argonauts fictional Greek hero in search of the Golden Fleece which my Jason finally found if I donate his organs and saving for lives 3 still walking this planet gratefully over 16 and a half years later it's also represents 5 months July August September October November which are of course three of my daughter's birthday months my month of October and Jason and some month of November so talked about that with your Jason and see how those months link up with your family and of course thanks for your wonderful support and review coming from a cell phone with running sins is dr. Ricky 1024 have a blessed weekend

reply by Diana L Crawford on 21-Jul-2019
    I named my son Jason as it means ?healer?. And yes, we are aware of the months spelling out the name. His birthday is 11/7 and his daughter?s (born 9/18) mother born 7/11. His daughter date is the total of 7+ 11 or 11+7 and they are equally space July, Sept, Nov. Funny you should mention to check the association of those months! And yes, I function here by cell phone! A little difficult at times! LoL! You have a continued blessed weekend yourself!

reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
    Jason 11-05-85.
    Your son
    Jason 11-07-?.
    11+7=18
    My Jason's age
    (Before Passing)
    My youngest daughter Dana
    9-30-85
    Oldest Corrine Alexis
    7-14-83
    Jason, Dana, and Corrine's mother
    12-06
    18 again.
    Point is they say numerology can predict and it also has a lot to do with time and reasoning.
    the fact that my wife Carol and who passed away November 26th 03 a little less than eight months after Jason.
    At the age of 17 was told she would never be able to produce a child after for appendicitis not only did she have two doors with her first husband but then she married me and it was three more working basically with a only one fallopian tube that was ruptured or scarred which makes all the children's births basic Miracles with Jason being an angel and Dana thwarting death twice so far.
    Rick

reply by Diana L Crawford on 21-Jul-2019
    I?m so sorry for your losses! What an amazing person you are! I think you have just become my favorite on this site! xoxo!

reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
    Trying...
    With great gifts comes great tragedy.
    Before Stanley passed he said something similar about with great knowledge can come greet power when he was talkin about the beginning of the Spider-Man character.
    I've always been a fan of my son Jason after watching the pitman movie theater the movie Jason and Argonauts and hopefully something I said my son will be named Jason it took a while to get to that point couple decades but he was born and of course he found the Golden Fleece which was his own living body and graciously donated it to save others you don't see that everyday I've been a widower for 16 years after my wife committed suicide on eight months after Jason.
    As I learned about my gifts abilities to create miracles all these things from severe tragedy and testing about 7 years ago I tested myself as a lot of DC priests in the Latter-Day Saint Church of Jesus Christ after taking in the sacrament at 9:30 broke down 22 title poems and had to French missionaries timely and the 30-minute. To complete season 1 2 and 3 minutes land beautiful rhyming poem as I was nearing the end with only a minute or a little bit more or less she warned me I was knocked out of a haku in 5 seconds and then I finished up with a dedicated piece to Jesus Christ honoring him five times it is Neymar Jesus Christ our Savior when I was done the one missionary notice my handwriting switch from left to right as I press down harder but each of those words about Jesus she said and asked me why did you do that and I replied that I wasn't holding the pin during that time..
    Rick

reply by Diana L Crawford on 21-Jul-2019
    Such a depth to you I see. Most people can be so superficial, never knowing what deep conversation even means. I am honored that you would share your story with me. I don?t know that I could survive losing either of my children or grandchildren or great-grandchildren. I sometimes also feel that when I write, I am not holding the pen. :)
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Thank you for inviting us into your poem with the touching title and family portrait. I have an only child, a forty-two-year-old bachelor, and I cannot imagine his passing. May Jason keep flying with his worthy wings! -Joan


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
    I do have four daughters and I look at one of people that Jason saved who's now a woman grown as my fifth.
    Rick

reply by Joan E. on 20-Jul-2019
    I am glad to hear you have your daughters to focus on and love. Have a serene weekend- Joan
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I liked the poem - surely did - but the beginning paragraph bothered me - first of all you relisted the task of sending your son on his way. That can't be what you mean? the first paragraph (in my mind) should begin with the grief and sorrow, then the knowledge that Jay is going to God. You express the pain and suffering in the second paragraph.
And I grasp what you're trying to say - but that first paragraph came across wrong to me.
As for a book I think you'd need more details along the way, plus this seems only one incident? Just my opinions.


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
    I'll recheck the beginning paragraphs and see what you're talkin about number one and of course if it's going to become a book it'll have a title and a prologue explaining it which it will be based on the actual original accident where he wasn't killed but brain damage and then of course on April fools Day 2003 we had a decision to make which is a parent's worst nightmare of whether or not to accept his death or two allows basically his organs be taken and delivered to strangers across the United States that you may never hear from again which I had heard from two of them.
    Thanks,
    Rick

reply by Gail Denham on 19-Jul-2019
    What a decision - how I 'd hate to make that difficult decision. Oh my- the grief you've gone through. Blessings.
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You deliver a wonderful recipe for conjuring "your angel". The roses were a special touch of divine inspiration. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
    glad you enjoyed is some trying to build this one up to at least a blue ribbon with enough reviews to pump it up it's already pretty far up thanks Ricky
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My friend, yours is a style of writing that is unique and deserving of much attention -- I don't get around to reviewing your work often for my own, personal reasons (not the least of which is that I try to read what amuses me, and your poetry is often so sad). (I think you know I lost a son too.)

Forgive me, and don't let it stop you from writing, yes? The imagery in your work is splendid, Rick.


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2019



reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
    since we've known each other quite a few years I think you did one time mention about that but I'm I can't remember exactly your circumstances my course is horrible as anybody's can be in the thought of losing a child no matter what age is a parent's worst nightmare just when you think you've had it bad someone else has it worse thanks for reading this I hope it inspired you dr. Ricky 1024

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 19-Jul-2019
    You're most welcome, Rick. :)
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