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Sallyo
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I am Australian.
Therefore, I write like an Australian.
 
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That's a perspicacious verse anyone might be proud to know and identify with. I could suggest the lines:
I'll take greed and hate and envy
and send them along their way.
might scan better as
I'll take greed and hate and envy
Send them on their way.
but so long after the writing I expect it's "set".


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2019


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I love the words to your poem and how you made the change I'm very proud of you and I'm sure you became a better man
I can speak for I have been many stormy storms and had to change my ways, which worked better for in the end
thank you for sharing Cookie


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2019


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Hello again Jaybird. It was a pleasure to read your work as It always is. I don't think most of us are who we need to be, but very few of us are smart and wise enough to realize it. Good piece of work.


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Hello Mr Jaybird.
Very thoughtful self analysis writing.
This back in the 60's is forward looking thinking for ones futures sake. Wish I could have done that in my youth, it could have saved me some hard lessons in life. Thank you for Sharing your Gifts and advice.
Blessings.


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2019


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This poem is talking about how to be happy, if you intend to interpret this way. I think it is a poem of the emotions we feel inside. No grammatical errors. Excellent work!


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This poem is delightful and well-written. It movingly conveys the wisdom
it takes to know that one needs to be better. It also describes the idealism we felt when we were younger.


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What a wonderful insight, a true ah-ha moment. I'm sure this thought changed your life for the good. It's very well-written, interesting, relatable. Thank you for sharing this special moment with us.


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Profound words indeed. I see they were written the year I was born. We would do so much better if we realized how futile it is to waste a single precious moment of our lives on hatred, anger, fear or any other negative emotion.
Well done. No suggestions for improvement.
All the best,
Jan


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In this poem, you say how you have lived your past life valueless, you have experienced righteous living and hope for a happy living changing over of your sad times; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing

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should enhace my efforts ---- should enhance my efforts
I'lll take greed --- I'll take greed
I'lll save fear --- I'll save fear
This was a definute factor ---- This was a definite factor
my life's changeiver ---- my life's changeover



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Yes. Already a big fan after reading this. I too prefer rhyming poetry that is cleverly written, as this is. Love the first verse especially. A great example of being a realist. Knowing what gifts you were given and which you weren't and running with it. well done


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