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it just keeps coming

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rtobaygo
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Once again, good morning, Gareth.

Enjoyed the poem in the images. I liked the smooth flow and pace. To me you've captured the thoughts of one suffering from depression:

rain pouring down drowning everything it touches as opposed to sustaining life
Sun splits the sky, it matters not inside I'm drowning as opposed to most people enjoying the scene.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray


 Comment Written 13-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
    Many thanks, Ray. G
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Great presentation of black and white which enhances the feeling of desperation and drowning. The dramatic approach in meaning and the linear placement are cleverly used to build intensity. Good job.

Melissa


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    Many thanks.
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Hi G. I like the presentation of the poem. I also read the poem as an observation of the external events going on around him but the last line describes the crisis of the soul which minimizes the turmoil outside. Robert


 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019



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    Many thanks, Robert. G
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I really did like this one. Sun shining on the outside and raining on the inside. Like laughing on the outside and crying on the inside. I have had this experience many times.
Elaine


 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019



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    Much appreciated. G
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Hi, Gmg... Well, you're in Northern Ireland... what do you expect but rain! ;) Nonetheless, I'm familiar with the rain inside feeling. I like the way you expressed that, from the outside to the inside... even when the sun comes out, sometimes it doesn't.


 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019



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    It's not as bad as you think... we sun three afternoons a year. :) I blame global warming.
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I like this one, raining on the inside, drowning in despair but outside the sun is shining, it just hasn't gotten in to him yet. Good one G, really enjoyed the emotions in this one.
cheers,
valda


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    Many thanks as always. G
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Somedays I feel exactly like that as well. Then when I lived in Washington state. . .it actually did just keep coming! Well-written and I like the white typeface on black background. I think it helps to focus on just the words. Nice work.


 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019



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    Many thanks. G

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    :)
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I would like "It won't wash away. " to be dropped a space so there's a gap and more impact on that line, because for me, that initiated the feeling that is summed up in the end.
I have no grammatical gifts or formal English, so that's probably not proper form, but I loved this poem.
I loved it a lot.
Pearl


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    Much appreciated, Pearl. G
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This is a wonderful poem. Expressed well with word choices of feeling overwhelmed. We all feel that way sometimes. Last four lines are particularly impactful. Illustration is perfect. A nicely done piece. Marilyn


 Comment Written 09-Aug-2019



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    Much appreciated, Marilyn. G
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I believe Gareth that you have touched on something quite hard to get to but simply fabulous once it's achieved -- EMOTION! Your piece brings me to tears cause I believe I have experienced this type of depression and it rains nearly every day where I am right now. So very well written and experienced by this reader. xoxo deborah


 Comment Written 09-Aug-2019



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    It's short and simple but I think it works. lol
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