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Pantoum for a New FanStory Class


The pantoum is just one of several forms we shall studying

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I must admit I've learnt most of these forms simply by googling shadow poetry, but really have no idea if they are going by strict convention or not. (I stick to the rhyming, syllable and repetitive rules) I'm a little cash strapped so I wish you and your students well Jim, we spent our money on travel, observing culture and people, I consider it well spent, the GFC took care of the rest. But well done, I've written a couple of pantoums, (isn't that Malayan origin?)


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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
    Thank you for this review. There seem to be many slightly different definitions particularly of the pantoum. One site stipulates only three stanzas, another fails to observe the neat twist in the tale. The form originated in Malaya but the repetious nature is very much akin to French forms and of course French poetry does l ove to putits tail in its mouth. One of the things we will be discussing in class will be the suitability or not of the various forms for different types of poetry. The forms are easily picked up, the various ways in which they might be used is something else again.

reply by royowen on 25-Aug-2019
    I thought there were some loosish definitions. Thanks Jim.
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LOL. What a fun ride through this well-written poem about the study of poetic forms! I won't be taking the class due to time constraints, but I will be googling these forms. Thank you for sharing the poem.


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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
    Thank you so much for this supportive review and six star grading. Both are appreciated.

reply by ShyWri on 25-Aug-2019
    You're welcome.
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Good idea to teach and share knowledge on these difficult form. The sestina I avoid - passionately - somehow it throws me. But I've tried many of the others and had success.
Nice idea - we'll be having lots of talent on Fanstory.


 Comment Written 23-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
    Thank you very much for reviewing this pantoum. The sestina is indeed a bit daunting at first sight, but here's a thought. Join the class and the sestina might not throw you any more. lol.
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A cleverly formed poem here in the style of an advertisement! I wish you luck with the recruitment, I am sure that it will be well worth it for the poets on this site, I wish you luck, it sounds like a lot of fun, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 23-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
    Now I thought it was an advertisement in the style of a poem, or at least a pantoum. Very many thanks for reviewing this.
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Wish I could, but horribly behind after Book Week! Great call to arms. Pity I'm feeling pretty darn 'armless just at present... sir.
I might at least be able to read some of the results.


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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
    Please do. Should circumstances change you would be very welcome. Many thanks for reviewing.
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I like how you written this poem. It is structured good. Interesting topic on phantoms. Thanks for sharing! No mistakes found. Very good work! I like this poem.

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 Comment Written 22-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
    Thank you for reviewing. You make no adverse criticism. Indeed yoyu say, there are no mistakes so I am at a loss to know why you grade this as only four stars. If you grade lower than 5 stars you really owe it to the poet to explain why, otherwise how can they improve?

reply by Raul1 on 23-Aug-2019
    You're welcome.
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This is a fine example of a rhyming poem. I enjoyed the repetition, the mention of unusual poetry forms and the unusual rhymes, such as "sestinas" and "between us." You will go far.


 Comment Written 22-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
    But probably not far enough! Many thanks for this complimentary review.
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This is extremely interesting and I appreciate the author notes. Very well done and much to learn here! You did very well (I am saying this knowing nothing about Pantoum until now, but I like what you've done here and the visual is eye-catching! It made me stop and read the poem. Great job!
Good luck with teaching this!
Wendy


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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
    Many thanks for your appreciative review.
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Clever commercial poetry, or is it a poetry commercial? And how instructive to use a pantoum to advertise a class on writing a pantoum. Do you have alternative lines for ladies' classes? I like the line "all along with their refinements" which sounds more polite than re-working or editing or polishing. Thanks for posting!


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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
    This advertising of my classes in an appropriate poem is something I have done with every class since I started teaching on this site. Thank you for reviewing this one. I am afraid we are strictly unisex. Lol.
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An artfully constructed Pantoum, Jim. I like the way you describe that invidious form, the Sestina! I have wrestled with it once or twice but don't think I have it quite pinned down yet. I admire the humour of your rhyming in this poem. It brought several smiles of appreciation!
This is a class that I would have enjoyed. However, my daughter gives birth to her second child next month and I shall once again be winging my way to Queensland.


 Comment Written 22-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
    I thought your daughter lived in the USA or have you more than one? Enjoy your trip. I think this is a class you would have enjoyed too. Clearly grandfather duty comes first. Thank you for your appreciative review.

reply by tfawcus on 23-Aug-2019
    No, just one daughter. She moved from New York a month ago and has bought a house near Brisbane. Much to my relief. I detested NY, and the journey there even more.

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
    I can believe that, Grandad!
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