Contact Us | En español    
         Join today or login

Status

New Here?
Sign Up
Fast! Three Questions.

Already a member?
Login

Contests

80 Word Flash Fiction
Deadline: In 2 Days

Rhyming Poem
Deadline: In 4 Days

Loop Poetry Contest
Deadline: Apr 12th

Haiku
Deadline: Apr 15th

Dribble Flash Fiction
Deadline: Apr 20th


Writing Classes

0 classes available. Click here locate a class and to learn more.

Rank

Poet: None
Author: None
Novel: None
Reviewer:None
Votes: None






Reviews from
In A Flash ~ Flash Fiction


Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "A Quiet Place"

Flash Fiction

  26 total reviews 
Comment by
Susan X Smith
MS, MBA
Retired from Gov't
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  80 (+1)
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  67
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
This sweet little piece creates an atmosphere when coupled with the picture. It reminds me of my own happy afternoons sitting by a fountain in a park. Well, kids do interrupt things! Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 01-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 06-Sep-2019
    Hi Susan. Thank you so much for your nice review. Marilyn
Comment by
LisaMay
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  15
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  1
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  50
 

#1 Ranked Author!
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
You have depicted this tranquil oasis, appealing to all our senses so that we relax into the natural harmony with you, then bloody hell, what a rude awakening to have it spoilt by the intrusion of lively children. There is a time and a place for everything, but when the time and place are not compatible it is definitely time to leave that place (much as we might actually enjoy the company of children - at the right time, in the right place!)


 Comment Written 01-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 06-Sep-2019
    Hi Lisa. Thank you so much. I DO like kids, but sometimes we do want peace and quiet. Marilyn
Comment by
Joan E.
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  47
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  
 Rank:  13
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
I liked the picture's reinforcement of the "perfect urban oasis" you describe. I enjoyed your including examples of the many "fragrances and sounds". The jarring conclusion was quite realistic as well. Smiles- Joan, from Ashland


 Comment Written 31-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    Hi Joan. Thank you for your nice review of this piece. (and I do like kids.) Marilyn

reply by Joan E. on 31-Aug-2019
    I do too, but peace and quiet are treasures! Smiles- Joan

reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    Agreed. Give me the tranquility of home with my kitty and doggie.
Comment by
Mystic Angel 7777
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
 
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
This is a beautiful contribution to the challenge, Marilyn. Your imagery is stunning and evokes reaction from all of the senses. You are quite right about the influx of craziness once school lets out - one day the same kids will be thinking exactly what you are now :). Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.


 Comment Written 31-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    Hi Monica. Thank you. I do like kids. Have two super grandsons. For story's sake, I had to be a little grouchy. Marilyn
Comment by
Sylvia Page
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  310
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Hello Marilyn
Seems like an ideal spot to relax and take in the sights and sounds of nature and enjoy the fragrances that permeate through the air. Nothing like the scent of freshly mowed grass to give freshness to the whole.
Loved the write.

My dog, head on paws, lays down next to me.
Best
Sylvia


 Comment Written 30-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
    Thank you, Sylvia. I appreciate your review. Marilyn
Comment by
Dorothy Farrell
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  24
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  41
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Hi Marilyn, a lovely post for the fiction club. Perfect peace in a beautiful place, soon disturbed by screaming youngsters. That is the problem with urban oasis, the peace does not last. Dragonflies, one word otherwise sounds like dragons are flying LOL. A small detail on a lovely descriptive piece - dreamy picture. Warm regards Dorothy x


 Comment Written 30-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
    Hi Dorothy. LOL! Well, duh! Thank you for catching that crazy split of the two words. Don't know how that happened. It's fixed. Marilyn
Comment by
2014 Novelist and 2016 Short Works Writer Of The Year
Phyllis Stewart
Premier Writer
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Sure sounds like a "beloved place" all right. Too bad about summer. But you can't have it all.

My dog, head on paws, [lays] down next to me. <-- LIES down

Verb: to lie, takes no object
Present-lie: I lie in bed, feeling sick.
Past-lay: This morning, I lay in bed wanting more sleep.

Verb: to lay, takes an object (books)
Present-lay: I lay my books on the table and call, "I'm home."
Past-laid: After school, I laid my books on the table.


 Comment Written 30-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
    You are very right about that, Phyllis. I know better, but flubbed it. Will change it. Thank you. Marilyn
Comment by
Rikki66
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  56
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  131
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
It is a beautiful place we would all like to go someday. It is a picture of early summer or late spring in the city.**************************************************
RikkiLXVI


 Comment Written 30-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
    Hi Rikki. Thank you so much for your nice review. Marilyn

reply by Rikki66 on 30-Aug-2019
    You are truly welcome.
    Rikki
Comment by
Sugarray77
Melissa
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  14
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  40
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
I absolutely love your choice of beloved places. The beauty is stunning. About your verse... it seemed a bit contrived with odd contractions and stunted sentences. It is a good write for this prompt, just an observation.

Fondly,

Melissa


 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Hi Melissa. Thank you for your review of this flash fiction. I appreciate your comments and will go back and take a look at it again. Marilyn
Comment by
royowen
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  1
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
  
 
 Rank:  3
 

#1 Ranked Poet!

#3 Ranked Reviewer
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
I loved the times when school holidays came, my children were home, and having a caravan we would take off for the lovely outdoors, it's where Elaine and myself enjoyed them growing up, the girls remember enjoying their childhood, which meant so much. We all have wonderful memories and times of sweet bliss, your wonderful post, reminded me of that, well done Marilyn, blessings Roy


 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019



reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Hi Roy. Thank you for your review. I agree with you. I loved going to the park with my grandsons when they were younger and watching the kids. For this post, I made the kids a nuisance, but I really enjoy them immensely. Love to hear the giggling and shouts. Marilyn

reply by royowen on 29-Aug-2019
    That?s the best
  -1-  2 3  Next Page 


Market your book.
Advertising options.
A Flight to Remember
Princess Elizabeth has her life changed.


Share or Bookmark
  Contact Us | En español | Advertise With Us

© 2015 FanStory.com, Inc. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy