A sonnet that gives the reader a life's lesson. I have tried to write sonnets before but I never can get the thing to sound not forced. At seventy one i have discovered that getting this far is success enough for me.
The world is a pretty sad place these days, as most keep on treading that treadmill of wanting more things, more success, more money...I wonder when we'll ever get back to basics and learn to value the basic essence of life rather than adornments.
I thought your poem was not only excellent for its message, but the structure of a sonnet was executed really well here, and I found no hiccups or rough patches - it just flowed along. Well done!
Jaybird this is fantastic! I love how the flow of it is and the first 2 lines really set the tone of your message. And a great message at that! Wisdom that applies universally.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! I am looking forward to reading more of your creations.
I enjoyed your poem, Jay. Your lines read well with great rhymes. This is super advice for anyone. Money, although necessary, doesn't make a person. It is, as you say, the way the person acts towards others--not what money can but which is just for show. true action are worth more than money. Your poem reads like a prayer. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Admiration. Jan
Hello jaybird. This is an excellent rhyme didn't metered poem discussing the priorities of life. You list several options of how people live their lives and that the final choice is really what affects the quality of the life they lived. Robert
You've done it again! Left me smiling and nodding my sincere affirmation of your poetic wisdom! Woe to those who count their wealth in earthly currency! It won't buy them a moment's grace in heaven!--Karenina