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All Choked Up N Nothing to Say


Husband and Wife rediscover their Connection

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Mistydawn
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Choking is a horrid thing. The fear of it all, the feeling of pending doom. It happened to me once with a hard piece of candy. The worst few minutes of my life. She was lucky you were there.


 Comment Written 13-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
    Thanks Misty. After the surreal feel wore off, I needed to write about it.
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I'm glad you know the Heimlich maneuver. Next time I go out to eat, I want you at our table.

If she was truly grateful, she would pay you by talking only half as much. Is it too late to make a deal?


 Comment Written 13-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
    Thanks Phyllis. It was a surreal moment, but hard to imagine what could have gone terribly wrong. Felt I wanted to share it in some way.
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This is a good entry for the Flash Fiction contest. The first paragraph made me think this was heading for a dark finish, but the culminating gentle "twist" leaves the reader with a feeling of optimism. That's neatly constructed {smiles}.

Good luck with the competition {smiles}.


 Comment Written 13-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
    Thanks Alex. I wanted to find a way to express how in a moment one decision can change a life time. Surreal moment.
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I won't tell your wife. I don't know her... but this story works on all kinds of levels. It's a sly little suggestion that maybe if your character wasn't fond of his wife the silence might have been let become permanent...


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
    One of those moments that I wanted to express somehow. Thanks!
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Susan Larson
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An amusing little story told very well in very few words. But then, from what you say about your wife, you are not the one who is verbose. ; ) good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
    Thanks Susan!
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Congratulations on an enduring and successful marriage. This story is a fitting account of what happens when the chips are down. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
    Thanks! Appreciate how life can be defined in a moment more so now.
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This is a nice little snapshot piece, which shows a sliver of one couple's life and emphasizes how love conquers all. As someone once told me, when I started trying to write in this technique, I'm not sure that it's true FF yet, you will see how it gets on in the contest.


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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
    Thanks!
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