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Silence of an untold story

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Katherine M. Kean
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Congratulations on your bravery in letting this horrible experience out, and for all the context and additional details that you added in the notes from the author. I can feel for your distress, and you will be in my prayers. I think you will obtain much support from the community here, and that suddenly the story will let you go free somewhat. I hope that this will mean that you do not need to write to the school board.
I have given this 5 stars, as I don't see any point on you working more on it in this restricted form other than perhaps changing the word unseen to invisible, but you might find it helpful to your self-esteem to write a longer, more-detailed version later.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading. Sorry so late in responding. I have been with my brother; he had his surgery and is in recovery.

    This is the brother I wrote about in don?t tell me yet.

    Thanks for your thoughts. There is a lot I could write on this time period of my life and one day - perhaps I will.
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It sounds like it is a memory that needs action friend, so if you feel you need write to them then you should and hopefully move on and put it to bed. Your story highlights the hurt and psychological damage a single word can do.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    Sorry for the late reply.
    I am with my brother that I wrote about several weeks ago. He is in recovery from surgery.

    I think you helped me to pinpoint this story. It would have been a much better write to talk about just the one word.

    The title would have been:

    Just One Word

    I wasn?t clever with this at all, but at least I wrote about it.
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And well you should get it out of your system. The things we say to kids sticks. Other day I said something to a granddaughter that I wish I could take back - an off-hand remark only. I was fat and called "Gail the whale" - things such as that. I'll always feel fat.
Glad you're writing about this - it should be told.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading. Sorry so late in responding. I have been with my brother; he had his surgery and is in recovery.

    This is the brother I wrote about in ?don?t tell me yet.?

    Thanks for your thoughts. There is a lot I could write on this time period of my life and one day - perhaps I will.
    It wasn?t clever, it was painful to write.

    I think if I had written just about labels and words used to hurt children. It would have been very good.

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Some people should not be teachers. To be a teacher you need to be loving and to treat children kindly.
I'm sorry you had to live this.
Thanks for sharing your story.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    Very late in replying, due to the fact I am on the east coast w my brother. He underwent cancer surgery two days ago.

    I wish now that I had put more emphasis on how words can damage children instead of the story itself.
    Still good for me to write about it.

reply by Maria Jose Garcia on 27-Sep-2019
    I hope your brother is doing well.
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So many people that I know (including myself) remember similir things from schooldays, they never seem to go away. You think you've forgotten but they come back and haunt you. It sucks but we can't change the past. Sending hugs. Jen.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    Very late in replying, due to the fact I am on the east coast w my brother. He underwent cancer surgery two days ago.

    I wish now that I had put more emphasis on how words can damage children instead of the story itself.
    Still good for me to write about it.
    You are right- we can?t change it, but we can stop hurting.
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Some people should not be teachers. Rotten cow! You've written this well, I can feel the great effect this must have had on you, and I'm sure it was cathartic to write.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    Very late in replying, due to the fact I am on the east coast w my brother. He underwent cancer surgery two days ago.

    I wish now that I had put more emphasis on how words can damage children instead of the story itself.
    Still good for me to write about it. Cathartic as mentioned.
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It's not funny how one label can change or entire existence and force us to wear the invisibility cloak. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writing.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    Very late in replying, due to the fact I am on the east coast w my brother. He underwent cancer surgery two days ago.

    I wish now that I had put more emphasis on how words can damage children instead of the story itself.
    I am overly sensitive to this day is people tell me I talk too much.

reply by Iza Deleanu on 27-Sep-2019
    All the best to you and your brother, or spraying for a soon recovery for him. My dad is battling cancer as well. Unfortunately bullying and labeling is not affecting only children
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Unfortunately those were not the days re teachers. There were a ton of mean and cruel folks in the schools. I certainly hope things are better now, but how do we know. My grade 7 teacher was uncommonly cruel to one person in particular. She was a girl that just couldn't fathom Math, yet the teacher would pick her to answer questions and they were always wrong. She would tell her to make fists of her hands and put them on her desk and then she would wham her knuckles. I cringe every time I think about it. I am in my 80s and I still cannot get it out of my mind.
Yes I think you should write a letter to the school authorities. I might do that as well. Sorry, this wasn't very pleasant. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 21-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    I entered it the true story. I like to write metaphors or whimsical things. I don?t tell a lot of true stories, but felt Challenged with this short 50 word flash story.

    Years later, I found out my dad had been her history teacher. I don?t know any details. I suspected I was the object of deflection. She got her payback by being abusive to me.

    No matter the relationship I had with my father, he was considered an extremely good teacher. So it must have been something odd that happened.

    Somethings, we just don?t get to know.
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A very good but sad story. It's unbelievable how detrimental how a teacher can ruin a child's life, which is still going on today. I'm glad your adult life is much better.
I suggest you look at the beginning sentence about your husband "I do not my life live there" does not make sense could change to; no longer live there,


 Comment Written 21-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    Got it corrected. I learned years later, my dad had been her history teacher so I think I was payback. The odd thing is my dad was an extremely good teacher and was well liked by his students.
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You wrote this as fiction but it hit me in the gut, you actually described my youth. I joined the Navy at Sixteen. couldn't go in till seventeen, just to get the hell outa Doge. Is this true for you or is this just...fiction?


 Comment Written 21-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    Very late in replying, due to the fact I am on the east coast w my brother. He underwent cancer surgery two days ago.

    I wish now that I had put more emphasis on how words can damage children instead of the story itself.
    Still good for me to write about it.

    A story so many of us have experienced as children.

reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    Very late in replying, due to the fact I am on the east coast w my brother. He underwent cancer surgery two days ago.

    I wish now that I had put more emphasis on how words can damage children instead of the story itself.
    Still good for me to write about it.

    A story so many of us have experienced as children.
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