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Reflection


A man just trying to get through the grind of everyday life

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Diana L Crawford
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You captured my attention from beginning to end! Very well done! Very creatively written! Intense and somewhat scary at times! Really great job!

Thank you for sharing! xoxo


 Comment Written 06-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Thank you for your review

reply by Diana L Crawford on 06-Oct-2019
    Very welcome! This got my vote for being such a unique concept! xoxo
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your story. I really enjoyed reading it and it held my attention the whole way through. It was quite imaginative. Well done.


 Comment Written 06-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Thank you for your review
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mrobyn
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I enjoyed reading this - it drew me from the start and as I read about the boring life of the man locked in the same routines that were draining him of the zest for life I was not bored but moved through the dull routines with the man as if I in fact had become the reflection. A good strong piece of writing. I did find a few places where further proof reading might be in order - e.g. I Started . . . in paragraph 2. I also found that the easy reading pace that I was enjoying felt a little out of sync in paragraph 5 where there seemed to be too much repetition of the same words. But overall I liked your style of writing and your punch line caught me by surprise - I didn't expect that twist.



 Comment Written 06-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Thank you for your review
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tim dodd
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think I saw a movie like that once were the reflection came out and did all these horrible things and the alter ego was trapped on the other side.
It was spooky. I like where you are going with this. At first I thought the person was just crazy imagining the reflection was doing anything at all but then you could see it was really moving independently.


 Comment Written 06-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Thank you for the review I am glad you liked it
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Susan Morritt
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This is absolutely brilliant. I was enthralled with your tale as it progressed and astounded by the ingenuity of the whole scenario. Lines like, "right before they pull the chair out from under you" and "only he is in on the joke" made my skin crawl with its profound impact. Wow.

Susan


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Thank you for the review I am glad you liked the story
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I loved the trip this did on my mind, it was well structured and full of excitement all the way from the start to the very end. I liked how this was well thought out and very put together. It was a great read. Thanks


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Thank you for the review I am glad you liked the story
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A few twists and turns in this imaginative piece of writing. What you see isn't always what you get.
There is a common fairytale element here in the exchange of places. You've used it well.


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
    Thank you for the review

reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Thank you for the review
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Iza Deleanu
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I like how you describe the expression of the face in this passage :"Now I know that it is almost impossible to have a grin on my face that wide, on a Monday morning. This was not a normal grin either. It wasn't the "I'm happy," or the, "I just heard something funny," kind of grin. This was the kind of grin you see on someone's face right before they pull your chair out from under you, or make you sit on a whoopee cushion. It was the grin of someone who was about to pull the mother of all pranks, and only he is in on the joke. A grin that says, "It's ok that you know, because there is no way you can stop it." The look my reflection gave me unnerved me so badly that I left the bathroom without finishing shaving, and hurried out of the house with shaving cream splotches still coating my wet face." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
    Thank you for the review
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Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Nowhereman. That is an excellent story. It held my attention with every word. You did a superb job of describing the actions as well as the feelings of the character. It started out as a fatalistic trip but you turned it around in the last three paragraphs. Very well done. Robert


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
    Thank you for the review

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 03-Oct-2019
    You're welcome
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Rosemary Everson1
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As I was reading this I'm hoping that's it fiction....what a day in a life of an adventurer. Whoever the other reflection was, I'm sure that it's only a fictional character. Kind of a thriller, unreal.


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
    thank you for the review
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