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Reflection


A man just trying to get through the grind of everyday life

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the13thpoet
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Hello again Nowhereman1. I have to say, I like your writing style. It has a twilight zone feel to it. This story was very engaging and well written. Thank you for sharing, I think you did a good job!


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
    Thank you for the review. Im glad you like my stuff. I hope you will read them all haha
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Well done, how interesting, rebelling against one's own reflection, it's an image of myself, but then I could well be the actual reflection, the other me, that's completely non-conventional, completely anti social. But then...that wouldn't be me, now would it? An excellent and imaginative story, that "crops up" from time. Good character and plot. Blessings, Roy. Suggestion, I would put more spacing in the story, it tends to be a bit "blobbish" otherwise. Blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
    Thank you for the review

reply by royowen on 30-Sep-2019
    Well done
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This is well-written. It reminds me of a male version of the story "The Yellow Wall-Paper" by Charlotte Perkins Stetson. That is to say, the protagonist/narrator is having a sincere neurotic identity crisis and feeling as if there is no escape from the present state of affairs, combined with definite self-absorption. You can also read it as a sort of horror story a la "Twilight Zone" which is in season right now with Halloween coming up. I was going to point out that as well-written as it is, there are many run-on sentences! For example: Everything got dark and I could not see where I was right away. I spun around and what I saw made me sick to my stomach. -- I would put a comma after 'dark' in the first sentence. I would put a comma after 'around' in the second sentence. If all of the sentences like this were fixed, I would update the rating to six stars, honestly.


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
    thank you for the help. I will go back and try to fix those mistakes
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I can see where there''s nothing quite as scary as a part of you that suddenly seems to be unfamiliar and malevolent. Not easy to get away from one's self. Madness is always, just around the corner.

You should leave a full blank line between paragraphs. Nothing more intimidating to a reader than a block of solid print. It will cut down on the number of reviews for sure.

I enjoyed reading your story. So, the suppressed part of him takes over and starts to live his life. If it were so easy. We all live with a reflection, who seems to know more and who would be more daring, someone who might walk on the wild side. And we're all afraid to give him free reign. We know that guy doesn't have a filter. Lol! Makes for a fun read, though.


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
    Thank you for the review
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This is well penned as I saw no obvious evidence of SPAG. I will say that the formatting makes it less than enticing to read as when there are no clear breaks between paragraphs - the words tend to run together without clear impact given to each completed thought. This running together endlessly was distracting for me and I often had to reread a section to keep the train of thought in focus. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
    Thank you what is SPAG?

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 25-Sep-2019
    SPAG - spelling, punctuation, and grammar errors.
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Bill Pinder
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I enjoyed reading this interesting story about how the monotony of life can make you feel like you're ready to scream or want to jump out of your skin or want to do anything different even if it seems crazy. You have expressed those emotions in a very creative way. Thanks for Sharing, and I hope you have a real Life day that is not that stressful.
Bill

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 Comment Written 25-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
    Thank you for your review
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Cindy Warren
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Seems to me the guy's subconscious was telling him it was time to live. His boss was totally taking advantage of him, but then, he was making himself the perfect flunky. I agree with his reflection.

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 Comment Written 25-Sep-2019



reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
    thank you for your review
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