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Aaron's Dragons


Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Trouble Starts"

An aging knight finds a clutch of dragon eggs

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Very well written chapter. The story is engaging and entertaining. The characters and setting are really fun to follow. Thank you for sharing your story.


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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
    Thanks. I'm so glad you're enjoying my story.
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Another great post and I liked your many distinct personalities that you have given the dragons. I wonder how many more are going to hatch? Seems like a very heavy responsibility.

Suggestion:
"What now," Aaron asked his horse." (question mark instead of a comma)
" fallen log,then" (space needed)

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", finding the food he'd left for him. Pink saw him eating and joined him."
I feel like some information is missing. Did Aaron cook the deer meat? Was he eating the deer meat? Did he leave some of the deer meat for Mountain? Is that what Pink and Mountain are eating? This part wasn't as clear to me but I know your didn't want to get too long. You could have made this two posts and go into more detail about the foods and how it smelled and tasted to a very hungry Aaron.


 Comment Written 05-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
    Thanks. No, Aaron didn't cook the meat. The smoke would attract attention. He left it outside for the dragons to find. Aaron has been eating whatever apples or berries he can find.
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Oh, the problems and joys of telepathic communication, especially with dragons. The hero has his work cut out for him, including keeping his horse safe from his charges.
You have a great imagination. Keep writing.


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
    Thanks. Yep, Aaron has his hands full, and his life is about to get interesting.

reply by w.j.debi on 04-Oct-2019
    LOL. I love the foreshadowing in your reply.
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Aaron seems to be doing an awesome job in training the dragons to fend for themselves. They are happy that way as it gives them some sort of entertainment as well.
Sylvia


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
    Thanks. They'll have to grow up fast.
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It seems like a balanced relationship between Aaron and the sea dragon. It's more than just a natural connection but a conscious one. It makes for an interesting story.


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
    Thanks. He's attached to all of them, but a couple are special.
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There was a lot to say, and nothing really to keep my attention and want to continue reading. I thought this was too much of something that was boring to read. I couldn't really keep reading without thinking how long this was. It would've been better with a better pick of stories to write. Lacking entertainment.

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How sad that this young man has to do this all by himself. And now he won't even have another person to share his experience with. I think it's so cute the mountain dragon is so attached to him!

Can't wait for next chapter!!! xoxo


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
    Thanks. He'll have a bit of help, and of course he has the dragons.
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Good episode. As the dragons learn to find their own food, life will get easier for them and for Aaron. The water dragon has some major role here that isn't yet clear. I like the mountain dragon the best so far. :)


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
    Thanks. Yep, the little guys will have to look after themselves. I don't want to reveal too much too soon.
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Hello Cindy Warren

I like the dream part of your amazing witting of picturing in our minds how realistic Aron's dream was..
Gert


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
    Thanks. He is connecting with the water dragon in his dreams.

reply by Gert sherwood on 04-Oct-2019
    Hello Cindy
    thank you for letting me that Aron is connecting with the water dragon in his dreams.
    Gert
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Great writing that captured my interest and is very creative. I like how the dragons have unique personalities and special skills. The story flows well and is easy to read.
Bill


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
    Thanks. Yep, the little guys are pretty special.
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