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Mexico is a big bump


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Thank you for the update. I always enjoye reading your rambles.

Forunately I no longer have a car, (Fortunately?)

I asm still tryihng to get settled into my new apartment. (I am trying//)


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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
    Thanks for catching the spags, being blind really makes editing difficult if not impossible for me.
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I hate speed bumps. We don't have many here, they are usually in parking lots near the store front to keep people from running over those going in and out. And they are mild. Hope you get settled soon. Rox


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    Thanks, I hope I get settled soon too.
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Hi Sasha, I am glad I caught this one and found out you are moving. I can imagine you in your new place. How are you my friend?? Is your health going okay? I'm in a lot of pain with my neck, have been for the last 3 weeks. I am seeing a chiropractor familiar with MS on Tuesday. We are a good pair!! God bless, hugs, Giddy


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
    Sorry you are not feeling well. I HATE moving and am still trying to get settled. Went for a walk yesterday and got lost... not my idea of a good start.
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Good to hear from you, hope the new digs make your life a bit better... you deserve a break .... break,,, bad word..; ignore that,,,no more breaks.


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    Thanks for the laugh, something I can always count on you for.
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I honestly wish they would install speed bumps in our street Sasha, some "hoons" barrel down it at unimaginable speeds, they never really learn that they could cause a bad accident like run over a child, or career into someone's house. Good to hear from you Sasha, well done, blessings, Roy
I (asm) am? Still (tryhing) trying?


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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
    I agree, speed bumps do serve a good purpose.
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I realize this is a ramble, and it is a relevant, informative one that I like. I did suggest some corrections just the same. (I didn't see any desultory or long winded wanderings). I assume that you want it to be correct as well as conversational, so I offered some alternate ways to phrase sentences, which you can adopt or not. I noticed some extra spaces between words in some places and two spaces between sentences. With computers there should be only one.

They are everywhere; mostly in residential areas, to keep traffic moving
slowly.
Suggest: semicolon not needed after "everywhere"--should be comma

vibradores or topes depending
Need comma after "topes"

Topes are a large lengthy (much like a log in the road) rises in the street
that you do no want to drive over at any speed. Topes are several
small baseball size bumps that serve two purposes. They warn you
that you are driving too fast and that there is the possibility of
pedestrians crossing in that area.
"a" improper there, because you are using "topes" in the plural
Suggest: Topes are large, lengthy rises, resembling logs, in the street
that you do not want to drive over at any speed. They are baseball-
size bumps that serve two purposes: warning that you are driving
too fast and that there may be pedestrians crossing the street.

Forunately I no longer have a car, but I do ride in them occasionally. In
some towns the shocks in cars don't last very long and need to be
replaced often.
"t" missing in "Fortunately"; "very" weakens image:
Suggest: Fortunately, I no longer have a car, but I do ride in them
occasionally. In some towns the shocks in cars don't last long and
must be replaced often.

If you are not familiar with the area, it is easy to drive over them without
warning. It helps to watch the car in front because they will slow
down and let you know what is coming your way.
"without warning" not appropriate there.
Suggest: The drive not familiar with the area might hit these bumps in
the road. One way to avoid such damaging surprises is to watch
cars slowing down in front.

Vibradores are also on the highways. They appear when there is bus
stop and where pedestrians may need to cross the street to catch a
bus.
This paragraph is a bit confusing, with a mention of highways, then
streets.
Suggest: Vibradores are found on highways, at bus stops, which
pedestrians must cross in order to board, including children boarding
and exiting school buses.

Suggest omit the paragraph about crosswalks. It is off subject (walking
rather than driving) and detracts from the narrative. If you decide to
keep, I suggest:
There is a dearth of crosswalks in Mazatlan, and few stoplights work,
making crossing the street difficult for pedestrians.

I asm still tryihng to get settled into my new apartment. Next to big
bumps in the road, moving is another choice you may want to avoid
in Mazatlan.
Suggest: I am still trying to get settled in my new apartment. Next to
bumps in the road, moving is another activity you may want to avoid
in Mazatlan.



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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
    Thanks for the suggestions, I will go back and make the changes.
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Sasha,
It's so good to be reading your writing again. This is hilarious about those bumps. And you increased my vocabulary with your vibradores and topes. It seems driving is getting crazier and crazier. I'm glad you are getting settled in to you new apartment. Sounds like things are going well for you.


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    It seems I will be getting settled for several weeks. Thank goodness Agustin is so helpful.
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Hi Sasha, it's good to see you posting again. I've been missing you, but didn't know how to contact you. So, you've now moved and promising the world you'll never do that again. Time will tell. I'm so glad you're okay. All the best. Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 11-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
    Moving is definitely not my idea of how to have fun.
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Never say never, Sasha. That will surely come back to bite you. It seems every time I moved I found I needed something I tossed away. There is a reason we collect so much stuff, we may need it later. LOL I hope you get settled soon. Nancy:)


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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
    That is true, I am still looking for things I think I may have tossed out.
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I've said that before "never moving again" - but I know we will have to downsize sometime in the next 5 years or so. The bumps you describe must be worse than some we face in store parking lots - I do understand the need for them. How are you feeling? What's the latest?


 Comment Written 11-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
    I am feeling much better but my poor eyesight is really becoming a major problem.

reply by Gail Denham on 14-Oct-2019
    Right now I'm fighting either an upper sinus infection or there's something wrong with my eyes - we go to eye Dr. on the 23rd - it's getting irritating. and I have friend going through some of this "eye" trouble,. kind of scary -hang in there.

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
    I have had horrific sinus infections and almost lost a job due to one of them.

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
    I understand the ones in parking lots but the ones in the streets can be dangerous and cause you you to repair your shocks several times a year,

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
    I have finally completed my move and I have to confess, I hate my new place!
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