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Scene at a Honey Dew Dipping 5

a script scene with Pez and Pallas

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Funny, especially the names. Uncle Zeb's personality shines forth. Heck of a way to go, chopped up and dropped in a septic tank. But, alas, seems the gig is up.


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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    Thanks, Brett. I plan another twist for the end.
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Hello Bill Schott
Ah, you have a script here that will draw folks here on Fanstor to read and will be curious what is found in the septic tank, including me.
Gert


 Comment Written 20-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    Thanks, Gert. So far they have found a finger, wig, and what looked like a partial dental bridge, but was a piece of a human mouth.

reply by Gert sherwood on 20-Oct-2019
    Well it sounds like you better put the lid on your pectic tank, unless you have more gross body parts to freak me out.
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Run Forrest, run! It seems to me that the boys might be in a slight bit of danger. Uncle Zeb might be a killer and I think the boys should be edging towards the door with the intention of running away fast.


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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2019
    This will all settle down soon.
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This is certainly a unique storyline. Zeb appears to be just as odd as the other two characters, but doesn't sound like he would be capable of murder. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.


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    Thank you, MA
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Oh, no! What's with the bathroom? Zeb must have something to hide. According to Zeb, Zookie ran off with Keifer Pancake, the mailman and they are both alive and living in Cantstandastan. But something is definitely amiss. Funny stuff with the names. You're really going for the suspense in this. At least the nephews got a break from dealing with the septic tank. Great work. judi


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    Thanks, Judi. I hope to reach a much less dark conclusion, although I might have spilled a bit too much blood.

reply by judiverse on 20-Oct-2019
    Oh, I'll be curious to know what they found in the bathroom. Spilling lots of blood seems to be a requirement in these murder mysteries. judi
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Oh dear, Bill. This is grizzly if I've ever read anything like that. Are you building up to the Halloween, or is it something even worse? All best. Ulla:))


 Comment Written 19-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
    Just two uncles following clues to what they think is a murder 'sewer'side.

reply by Ulla on 19-Oct-2019
    hehe. Okay
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Oh, dear!! Now we just have to wonder until next time...! This one must have been your 'lead up to Halloween' without telling us it was... yeah? :) :) Thanx for sharing, Bill, and even though I can't believe I'm saying this, I look forward to the next installment! ;) Yvette


 Comment Written 19-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
    These boys grow on you, Yvette. I'm trying to shape their personas to be as defined as Pons and Ned.
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A creepy tale. Love it so far. So Zeb chops up people in his bathroom. LOL! What fun. Good one for the Halloween season. It says I don't have enough text...maybe now...


 Comment Written 19-Oct-2019



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    I think I'll throw another twist in for good measure. Thanks for giving this a look, Phyllis.
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I could take any amount of one of these scripts Bill, brilliantly funny is the discourse between all of these incredibly odd characters, it doesn't sound much like they listen to another, I wonder what the guys saw? Well done my friend, good scripting, blessings Roy
Typo (expence) expense?


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    Thank you, Roy, for the kind review and the spell check.

reply by royowen on 19-Oct-2019
    Bless you Bill
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A slaughterhouse? What did old Zebediah do in there? And why didn't he make some remark about the stink the boys brought into the house. Thought they needed to go through a car wash first!


 Comment Written 19-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
    I expect the hygiene is suspect here.
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