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I Am the Cat


Man likes the dog more than the cat

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Your poem is very good and conveys the hidden message very well. I enjoyed the satirical slant and think the presentation very good and clever. Well done.

Melissa


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    It was kind of fun to write and vent a little frustration with our dog.
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A very well-written poem telling the man in your life that you are also around and need as much attention as he is giving the dog and reminds him you are the cat in his life that can get nasty when the nails come out.


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
    Thank you,
    I love this review. You nailed it.
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This is a fun write about a cat losing his place as king of the walk! Of course cans demand attention and have no time for silly dogs as they are far too superior for that and I believe that it is true that they will seek somewhere else to live! I loved the repeated line in your poem that reinforced the cats determination, much enjoyed, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
    Thank you for writing.
    I get frustrated with the dog. I love the company of a dog, but the dog is never a person. My husband sees the dog as a person.

    Fun to write and vent a little.
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This is really good, clever, and well thought out. I think that many men get preoccupied with hunting, their hobbies, the dog and neglect the cat. The cat is doing everything it can short of screaming at the man to notice. The door seems to be the final option as you've so eloquently stated. Perhaps he may wake up then. Hopefully it won't be to late. I like the powerful and cleverly penned message woven into this well written work.. Well done!


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    Totally got my thoughts on this one. I could have written a clever cat revenge, but in the end -decided not to. After all, the cat only wants to be noticed. The cat doesn?t want to fight.

    One thing I like about writing is that any given piece can have layers.
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Not sure about this one friend. Once I had read your notes the poem itself became clear and had more meaning and stood out more. Without the notes I thought you were talking about a cat and was waiting for the payback/revenge which never really happened.The notes were definitely needed here... She hopefully left while he was at work, loaded all their worldly possessions onto a removal truck and left the house empty except for the dog : ))


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    I had one reviewer speak along the same lines as you. I shouldn?t need to use my notes to help the reader understand. The reader should be able to follow and the notes just add a little extra. I thought about rewriting, but I did not enter it in a contest. I will remember what I learned here and employ it in my future pieces.

    The reason the cat didn?t take revenge, was because what she really wanted was to be noticed. The cat wasn?t looking for revenge.

    A question here waiting for an answer: Will you be willing to offer the same friendship to me(cat) as the dog.

    Since the cat wasn?t getting noticed, she slipped out the door to do something more interesting. (Like catch a mouse).
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Very cute poem. I love the cat's comments throughout. However, I was expecting some dire paybacks - such as shredding the curtains, jumping on man's back from top a dresser - clawing on the dog.
Rather nice cat overall.


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.

    I wanted to write a great revenge at the end- I really did. The cat didn?t want a fight- just to be noticed. Especially, since the cat thought herself to be beautiful.
    This cat may seem nice, but maybe slipping out the door was the revenge. Perhaps, she would go catch a mouse.

reply by Gail Denham on 14-Oct-2019
    years ago when I stayed over at a friend's house her cat Butchie would lie on my chest with her nose up to my chin - I was afraid to move. did not like that cat - that cat also would not go outside if the weather was bad - to do his business. he'd hold it. I can still see him...some cats go great lengths to be noticed.
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LOL! Very funny. I enjoyed it when I thought it was a real cat, but after reading the notes, I like it even better.
Great poem and artwork.
Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading
    Just something fun to write and vent my irritation about our dog. It.
    I thought it was funny too.
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It's funny the personalities cats take on. In my experience, a dog is a dog. It jumps on your leg, it licks you, it pants, it slobbers. Just my experience, mind you. Cats have personality. I can see a cat thinking this, and even saying it, if it could. Love it.


 Comment Written 11-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    It was a good way to vent about our dog. I think what I really want is the friendship my man has with the dog. The frustration is that I am not a simple dog. I am a very complicated, arrogant cat/ woman.
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Awww, poor cat. Maybe she could get revenge by refusing to cook his dinner or do his laundry until he can find some time for her. Or she could come home with a real cat and snuggle with him until the man is jealous. LOL Thanks for a fun read.


 Comment Written 11-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading,
    It is actually my plan to get a cat. My husband is allergic but he can get shots. I want a warm, purring cat by my side. Of course, ai might relent if he agreed to some back rubs. Lol
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In my opinion, though a striking write, I believe the message in this particular write should be made clear in the verse, requiring no notes of explanation or intent. It can be easily done, without compromising the intent or flow of the poem. The reader forms his or her own view and conclusion of writing anyway, hence the reason for literature classes.
With your permission, examples only, and my opinion only;
1st stanza - "I am like a cat" - or
2nd stanza - "I am proud as a cat"...

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
    Thank you for reading.
    Yes, I like your ideas. It would be easy. I don?t know that I will go back and change it since I did not enter it in a contest. But thank you for sharing the technique - I will remember.

reply by evesayshi on 11-Oct-2019
    You're very welcome, Karen - I understand...Eve
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