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Tommy


...he has been gone for hours

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Comment by
papa55mike
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What a great entry into this contest. This story is very well-written and I love the picture.

Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike


 Comment Written 15-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
    awe! Thanks so much! This is a new genre for me, so i greatly appreciate the feedback! xoxo
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Debbie Pope
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Just horrible. I don't know why I am reading the entries in this contest. They are creeping me out for sure. Yours is one of the worst. Tommy sounds like such a good kid, doing manual labor on his parent's farm. He deserved better than your ending.
Obviously, you have told a complete story, and it is definitely horrible. Good job and good luck in this awful contest. This is a good entry.


 Comment Written 15-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
    lol! thank God it's fiction! i appreciate though that you took time to read and found it met the contest requirements even if it was a little unnerving. xoxo
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I'm sorry, but I am never going to 'enjoy' horror. Your 3 sentences are well constructed and definitely deliver a horrifying situation, but how distressing this would be for anyone to read who has been confronted by a loved one's death by murder or suicide.


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
    Yikes! thankfully this is fiction, and I hope no one would ever find their loved one as described here. :( Thank you though for your review. No one puts a notice of how gory it can be or not. I certainly do not mean to offend anyone, least of all you, my friend.

reply by LisaMay on 14-Oct-2019
    I know that no offense is intended - I am just squeamish. xx
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Oh my goodness! Did Tommy have some enemies or was it the ghouls on Halloween who committed this horrific murder? I guess we will never know, but this is a chilling scene, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 14-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
    Hmm...a good question! I think that has yet to be determined! :) thanks for stopping to read! xoxo
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Oh, my.....that's quite dreadful and gory! You should probably put a warning on this one for violence.... Also, in your second sentence the first portion set off in commas [After being gone for many hours and no sign of his return] does not match the noun that it should be modifying [Tommy's family]. Good luck at the polls... :) ;)


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
    Thanks! Got it! I?ll review again! Appreciate your awesome feedback!
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This is frightening and spooky. I think your story has a chance of winning the contest! No mistakes found in this story. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
    Thank you very much! I appreciate your comment!! xoxo

reply by Raul1 on 13-Oct-2019
    You're welcome.
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Susan X Smith
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This story certainly is horrific. It meets the contest requirements in terms of subject matter and length. The picture complements it nicely. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
    Thank you for taking time to read and offer your feedback! xoxo
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Susan Larson
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Gross! I'm new to this format of three sentences of horror. If the point is to create a scene and feeling of horror, you have accomplished your objective.


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
    Ha! Love your response! Definitely gross! Thanks so much for taking time to read! xoxo
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