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That got rid of HER!


Sometimes a dog's gotta do what a dog's gotta do

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CrystieCookie999
 
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This is a great story. It flows very naturally. I am impressed the dog could 'plan' everything so well. I can see why it won! Also, I think I would have liked to have known what the dog narrator's name was. If he knew Tom's name, and he knew Sophie's name, surely he also knew his own name. Great writing.


 Comment Written 26-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
    That's a very good point. I didn't even think of giving the dog a name. Shame on me. :( Thanks for reading.
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Katherine M. Kean
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This is understated revenge. The dog doesn't do anything out of character except perhaps the rat (a tough prey for an avowed poor hunter), and Tom is very torn between finding all his dog's antics humorus and supporting his girlfriend. Little surprise that she leaves in the end. I found it a pleasant read, well-written and well-paced.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Thanks very much for the kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Oh my gosh, this is cute. I love personification of the dog (although I know dogs really do think like people). Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write.
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Elaine Chiodi
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What a delightful story. True to life, very funny, and with believable characters and dialog. And it stars a DOG. I love it. Good luck in the contest... ...ec


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Thanks so much for the lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it.

reply by Elaine Chiodi on 24-Oct-2019
    You're quite welcome... ...ec
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brenda bickers
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Oh my,
what a great story. I loved this. I always knew dogs were clever, and this one had it all worked out. Good on him. She got what she deserved. I love the way you wrote it from the dogs perspective, it gave the story a good feel and made it more entertaining.
This made me smile.
Brenda.x
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 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Thanks for the great review. It's always my aim to raise a smile. :)
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Rikki66
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This is a clever bit of revenge. The lesson never piss-off the dog that was first in the home. They have dominance.
Good luck in the contest.
Rikki****


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    That's a good motto to have - never come between a man and his dog.
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Rosemary Everson1
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I like your story. There's something about reading about rescue dogs. In fact a rescue dog is special. I know that they aren't always registered but still pretty cute.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Rescue dogs do seem to realise sometimes that they've been lucky. Thanks for taking the time to read this and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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the13thpoet
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A wonderful Wednesday to you fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your story with us, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Thanks for reading and for your review. Much appreciated.
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Lovely doggie, you did your best to keep Tom to yourself. This story is absolutely funny and revengeful from the dog's point of view, not at all funny for Sophie. Did she return?
All the best in the contest.
Sylvia


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Thanks for the lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it.
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shaffer40
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This is such a delightful, humorous story. It's a little sad, too, as you so cleverly lay out the demolition of the little dog's good life at the hands of the new, disagreeable love interest. I can't imagine that this doesn't happen a lot. Well, the ending is just desserts.

I had a few suggestions for punctuation and word usage:

There are two places where you've used the word "very," usually meant
to strengthen an image, but they actually weaken and, in most cases,
the word is useless. I would omit.

Suggest commas before the conjunctions "and" and "but."

Even us dogs have ways of getting back at those we don't like.
Suggest: Even we dogs have...

girl-next-door
Suggest no hyphens.

However I knew, Tom would need help if Sophie were to be persuaded to
leave.
Misplaced comma: should be after "However" rather than "knew".

She screamed which brought Tom running.
Suggest comma after "screamed".






 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019
    Thanks very much for the suggestions. I appreciate you taking the time to list them. I did think about 'we dogs have' but decided this mutt would probably say 'us dogs have' so I might leave that one as is. Thanks again.

reply by shaffer40 on 21-Oct-2019
    You're welcome for sure. I think you're right about the "we" vs. "us", now that you've pointed it out to me.
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