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Back to bangers and mash


Do you have a forte? A comedic monologue

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tfawcus
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Love your sense of humour. You made me feel quite homesick with your toad-in-the-hole and spotted dick! My staple in bachelor days was coq au vin which, as far as I remember, involved dismembering a chicken and pouring most of a bottle of plonk over it. There may have been a few mushrooms and onions involved when I was feeling adventurous.


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
    I'm surprised you didn't say pouring a little wine over the chicken and drinking the rest! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this.
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Hello! Haha wow, this is so well written and entertaining. I never thought I'd read a story about cooking and enjoy it so much. Half the time I stopped to look up the dishes. Toad In A Hole looks pretty good! But how she tried so hard to impress her beloved with a variety of dishes but in the end, back to what you know. There's definitely a lesson here: Changing the world around you doesn't change anything unless the person is willing to change! Thank you for sharing! And good luck!


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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Thanks very much for the lovely review. I'm really pleased you enjoyed it so much.
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This is such a funny escapade through cookbooks, cooking, and relationship with a tolerant, loving spouse through it all. It reminds me of my flirtation with vegan and vegetarian cooking; I have a collection of saved fancy recipes, but that's all they are -- a collection -- I eat fake meat, steamed vegetables, and nuts, nuts, and more nuts, with little imagination or variety.

That part about the quail eggs is hilarious. Well done.

I did see one little picky error: misplaced only (I posted an essay about common errors, including this one, on this site):

As it turned out, I only needed a dozen.
As it turned out, I needed only a dozen.
Only modifies the object and not the verb.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Thanks for the wonderful review. This is kind of based on fact. I cut a longer monologue short. It ends with the husband taking cooking lessons - in self defence! Suffice to say, my husband now does nearly all the cooking and loves it.
    I remember reading about the 'only'. It's not something that comes easily to mind when I'm writing but I appreciate you picking it up. Sorry I can't nominate you but I've already done so.

reply by shaffer40 on 23-Oct-2019
    Thank you for responding and the additional information about your husband and the cooking. I'm sure the ending is just as cute as the shorter version on here. Thanks also for the nomination wish.
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A wonderful Wednesday to you fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.


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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
    Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Hello mystery writer. I have to tell you that I learned a lot about foods that I still know nothing about in your monologue. It's quite funny and interesting that some food names are similar to things that we would not want to be around while we're having food. Good job and good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
    I agree. Some names are very off-putting I think. Thanks so much for reading.

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 22-Oct-2019
    You're welcome
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Much Italian food looks better in photos than it tastes it is more difficult to prepare than one expects. Good luck in the contest,*****************************************************Rikki


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
    I'm inclined to think most food looks better in photos than when we try to prepare it ourselves! Thanks for reading.

reply by Rikki66 on 22-Oct-2019
    You are most welcome.
    Rikki
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This is well-written. I like this line: I don't know what my forte is but if it doesn't hurry up and find me I may die never knowing. And also I like this part: So there I was with an extra three dozen quail eggs. If you ever end up with an excess of quail eggs, I don't really have any suggestions. I do know it's not a good idea to try to separate them to make an omelette. Then again, I liked: And even if I found them, I didn't like the thought of turning live crayfish into dead crayfish. And I would agree with this idea: I'm sure it tasted better for being called 'crescentine.' I thought this was an honest composition with realistic humor. Excellent contest entry!


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
    Thanks very much for taking the time to read and coomment. I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
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I think this is a fun entry for the Italian Food Frenzy contest.
Your story is told with humour and is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon


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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
    Thanks very much for reading and for the kind comments.
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I was wondering if you meant in the third paragraph, toward the end, to write 'do not make a chef'? I love Italian food if it's not spicy. Your recipes are some that are unknown to me. And quail eggs?


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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
    The 'make' phrase is a hark bark to Aristotle who said 'One swallow does not a summer make'. And yes, quail eggs are used in cooking - bt never by me! lol
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Too true -the kids gave me one of the fancy Emeril cookbooks - so far I haven't found anything I would cook in that book. I think I sold it. or traded it in. Back to the regulars - lots of chicken - occasionally a roast if I can get it tender.


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019



reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
    I've seen an ingredient listed as 'vegetarian eggs'. Do you think there are other sorts? lol
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